Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Movies and television have more negative effects than positive effects on the way young people behave. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
The effects of television and movies have been an appealing topic. Numerous people over the world state that young people are badly effected by television and movies. Personally, I am unconvinced with this statement due to the following reasons.
On one hand, knowledge improvement draws much of my attention. It cannot be denied that television raise people standard intelligence. Indeed, television programs ussually update and convey domestic and global information like bad weather coditions, diseases, wars. Consequently, people are capable to deeply savvy about sittuation surrounding them and aware of protecting them self and making world better. As a consequent, television programs are able to increase standard intellgence. More interestingly, it is well noted that movies and television are types of education such as documantary films, science movies and educative television programs. Because educative movies and programs usually have scenes to illustare about the knowledge included in them. Hence, watching educative movies and television shows surely creates chances for people to remember knowledge longer,deeply understand it and gain more knowledge that they interested in. Thus, people are certain to broaden their background knowledge when watching television and movies. Even better, this is sure to help people a lots in present and future. With no doubt, people's knowledge is highly likely to be improved by watching television and movies.
On the other hand, it is claimed that watching television and films waste people a lot of time. Therefore, this badly effects people daily schedule and people stand chances to have bad future. However, it is unnecessarily the case. In fact, people have to carefull allocate their time to watch television and movies to match with their daily timetable. Hence, watching movies and television do not waste much time. In addition, it is widely known that television and movies play important roles in aspect of entertainment. There are a lot of types of entertainment on television and entertaining movies. As a result, people are easily to entertain and relax. Therefore, people stand golden chances to refresh their mind, which encourage people to enjoy their life better and work more efficiency. By and large, the idea of watching television and films force people to have bad future is absurd.
All in all, personal enjoyment and knowledge improvement are the convincing reasons for my agreement. It is highly recommended people to carefully consider my writting to make the right decision on the effects of televion and movies.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 127, Rule ID: AFFECT_EFFECT[16]
Message: Did you mean 'badly affected'?
Suggestion: badly affected
...r the world state that young people are badly effected by television and movies. Personally, I...
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Line 2, column 877, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , deeply
... for people to remember knowledge longer,deeply understand it and gain more knowledge t...
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Line 2, column 1089, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a lot' or simply 'lots'?
Suggestion: a lot; lots
...ven better, this is sure to help people a lots in present and future. With no doubt, p...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, hence, however, if, so, therefore, thus, well, in addition, in fact, no doubt, such as, as a result, by and large, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 9.8082437276 10% => OK
Conjunction : 26.0 13.8261648746 188% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 29.0 43.0788530466 67% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 52.1666666667 94% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 8.0752688172 186% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2198.0 1977.66487455 111% => OK
No of words: 403.0 407.700716846 99% => OK
Chars per words: 5.4540942928 4.8611393121 112% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.48049772903 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.87940429543 2.67179642975 108% => OK
Unique words: 203.0 212.727598566 95% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.503722084367 0.524837075471 96% => OK
syllable_count: 700.2 618.680645161 113% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 20.6003584229 126% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.1344086022 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 33.9388808468 48.9658058833 69% => OK
Chars per sentence: 84.5384615385 100.406767564 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.5 20.6045352989 75% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.61538461538 5.45110844103 103% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.246283632481 0.236089414692 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0750479326758 0.076458572812 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0509048436911 0.0737576698707 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.174067679801 0.150856017488 115% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0797750688267 0.0645574589148 124% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.0 11.7677419355 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.79 58.1214874552 82% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.03 10.9000537634 129% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.18 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 97.0 86.8835125448 112% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.0537634409 80% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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