Television advertising directed towards young children (aged two to five) should not be allowed.
advertising is ubiquitous in our daily life and has subliminally affected many people's shopping preferences. even though it attracts remarkable misgivings, the fact that it facilitates our daily life is undeniable considering the precipitous decline of time we spend on choosing the proper commodity. it is a general belief that the heavy capitalization of a company can be took as a convincible signification of its wealth and better quality of goods. Disturbingly it is not true of advertisement focused on the young children. The differences of mental and physical conditions between the young and the adults may stand as a cogent factor to boycott these advertisements. Revolving around the irreversible consequences they may spell on the vulnerable children, the reasons are elaborated in the ensuing paragraphs.
First and foremost, it's disreputable that children are too naive to discern things they really need, in this sense they may be driven by these seemingly eye-catching advertisements, begged their parents and clamor to buy things unnecessary at all. The financial burdens foisted on the parents accordingly will definitely intensify the tensions of the family, especially for these young and newly-wed couples. Besides this, these advertisements may urge children to eat junk food and since these food could be exceedingly debilitating, they may even make damages on children's bodies at their most flourishing age. this kind of accidents just happened to my nephew, who is only 4 years old, however, under the temptations of advertisements for fried-chicken, he has gained surprising weights in several months and eventually proved to be unhealthy to some extent because of over intake of fat.
Furthermore, these advertisements can serve as a tool to entice children to buy exorbitant clothes or shoes to boast with their friends. children are susceptible and credulous for they are too young to gain the ability of self-discipline and are easily entrapped themselves with the vicious spiral of pursuing brands blindly. The rapidly increasing figure of luxury clothes dressed on children exemplify the fact they are outright devoid of self-control ability and may subject readily to the lures. this trend may even escalate if parents have no means to refuse their children's persistent requests.
To illustrate, advertisements do enable us to buy favorable goods without the hassle of comparing everything tediously before purchasing, but their positive influences are mainly on mature and clear-minded groups. When it comes to advertising directly towards children, we can not assure that these advertisements would not hamper the natural and healthy growing process of children and lead them astray.
In a nutshell, blemishes encompassed within advertisements towards children reinforce the idea that it is detrimental for the family and may cause severe results if we permit their circulations. Based on these statements mentioned before, I want to reiterate my standpoint that by no means should advertisements directly towards children be allowed.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, besides, but, first, furthermore, however, if, may, really, so, kind of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 9.8082437276 163% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 13.8261648746 130% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 50.0 43.0788530466 116% => OK
Preposition: 64.0 52.1666666667 123% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2604.0 1977.66487455 132% => OK
No of words: 472.0 407.700716846 116% => OK
Chars per words: 5.51694915254 4.8611393121 113% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.6610686524 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.23251211719 2.67179642975 121% => OK
Unique words: 276.0 212.727598566 130% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.584745762712 0.524837075471 111% => OK
syllable_count: 809.1 618.680645161 131% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 26.0 20.1344086022 129% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 49.057789052 48.9658058833 100% => OK
Chars per sentence: 144.666666667 100.406767564 144% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.2222222222 20.6045352989 127% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.66666666667 5.45110844103 86% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 11.0 3.85842293907 285% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.88709677419 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.272457653036 0.236089414692 115% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0868964850976 0.076458572812 114% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0814083879997 0.0737576698707 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.161658747422 0.150856017488 107% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0669177397833 0.0645574589148 104% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.7 11.7677419355 150% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 36.63 58.1214874552 63% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 10.1575268817 144% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.03 10.9000537634 138% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.81 8.01818996416 122% => OK
difficult_words: 146.0 86.8835125448 168% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 10.002688172 130% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.0537634409 123% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.247311828 146% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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