Television was one of the important inventions of the twentieth century. But, it is sad to say that whatever is shown on the television is not a correct representation of the real world. So, I agree with the idea that whatever is shown on the television does not give people an accurate view of the human nature. I believe this way for the two reasons discussed below.
First, the movies and series shown on the television don't depict a normal human nature. These films depict scenarios that will never happen in real world. For instance, I watched a movie called 'Kabir Singh' in which an abusive, aggressive man develops feelings for his classmate in a medical college. He pursues her for several days, takes her out with her without permission using group study as an excuse. Eventually, the woman falls deeply in love with the man as well. However, the girl's parents don't approve of their romance, given the abusive and aggressive nature of the boy and they marry her off to a groom of their choice. The man becomes infuriated and starts drinking heavily and almost ruins his life. After several months, the man and woman meet again in a park and the woman takes the man back citing that she never stopped loving him. This entire story sounds ridiculous and doesn't depict true human nature. People are not attracted to abusive and aggressive human beings. In fact, they try and stay away from them. But, this movie shows otherwise.
Second, the news shown on the television is also not a correct representation of the human nature. News channels manipulate their viewers into believing things that are not in anyway related to the actual issue at hand. For example, in India, there is a protest going on. The protest has been organised by farmers of the northern states of India against three new laws passed by the government. The protest is as peaceful as it could be. However, the news channels claim that these protestors are terrorists and want to harm the country. The news channels never show the plight of the farmers and how these bills affect them. All they claim is that these farmers are terrorists and want to harm the integrity of the nation. They keep on tooting the same horn even after several interviews with the farmers where it was made crystal clear that the farmers just want the government to revoke the new farm bills.
Considering these two examples of movies and news channels, I can surely say that television doesn't depict the actual nature of the human beings. Television is such a powerful channel and media channels and movie houses have control over what is shown to the viewers; but it makes me sad and furious to say that they are misusing their power and leading people believe into believing lies.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, anyway, but, first, however, if, second, so, well, for example, for instance, in fact
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 9.8082437276 31% => OK
Conjunction : 21.0 13.8261648746 152% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 47.0 43.0788530466 109% => OK
Preposition: 56.0 52.1666666667 107% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2218.0 1977.66487455 112% => OK
No of words: 478.0 407.700716846 117% => OK
Chars per words: 4.64016736402 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.67581127817 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.30980155156 2.67179642975 86% => OK
Unique words: 228.0 212.727598566 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.476987447699 0.524837075471 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 696.6 618.680645161 113% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 9.59856630824 0% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.94265232975 20% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 1.0 20.6003584229 5% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 478.0 20.1344086022 2374% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 0.0 48.9658058833 0% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 2218.0 100.406767564 2209% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 478.0 20.6045352989 2320% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 91.0 5.45110844103 1669% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 0.0 11.8709677419 0% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.88709677419 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.253800482684 0.236089414692 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.253800482684 0.076458572812 332% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0737576698707 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.176945734737 0.150856017488 117% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.138701154657 0.0645574589148 215% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 239.4 11.7677419355 2034% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: -405.23 58.1214874552 -697% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 0.0 6.10430107527 0% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 188.5 10.1575268817 1856% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 11.11 10.9000537634 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 29.95 8.01818996416 374% => Dale chall readability score is high.
difficult_words: 79.0 86.8835125448 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 56.0 10.002688172 560% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 193.2 10.0537634409 1922% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 30.0 10.247311828 293% => The average readability is very high. Good job!
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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