In their free time, young people (aged14-18) spend time taking part in different activities such as music lessons or competitive sports. Some young people devote their time in various kinds of activities, but other young people will spend most of their time focusing on one activity that is important to them. Which approach do you think is better?
Devoting enough time to do other interesting activities is a very significant part for students’ study life. As for a majority of students, most them prefer to do kinds of activities rather than concentrate on one specific activity. From my point of view, I assume that modern students should focus on an activity that is important for them.
To begin with, being absorbed in one special activity will help students make more accomplishments with the activity. When students start to focus on one thing, they will properly acquire a great amount of time to make a decent plan with their pace of learning. Following great scheme that students already have, students will comfortably enjoy in the process of doing. Compared with that, students who take a great numbers of activities might feel anxious and nervous when they do not get enough time to deal with lots of activities. For example, I have attempted to join various clubs when I enter my college at first year, and I feel exciting with my wonderful study life if I can get these activities in my future. However, I realize that I make a worst mistake, since I do not have enough time to face my formal course instead of spending too much time on other activities which do not relate with my study. Until I resolve these inconveniences and cancel lots of clubs activities, I already waste lots of time. Compared with my condition, some students who just focus on an activity always keep a great pace of learning. Thus, concentrating on one programs is far more of importance for modern students.
In addition, focusing on one project can bring better effect for students’ future. If students directly persist on one activity, like joining the chess club and always practicing their skills of chess, they can acquire lots of deeper understandings about this field than others. When he or she graduate from school, this successful skills will unquestionably help them a lot in their future. For a instance, my little brother has always been obsessing on the planet, such as some images respecting Mars, Earth, and so on. He is always willing to share lots of academic knowledge about astronomy to me in my daily life. After he enters his high school, he intentionally joins the school’s astronomy seminar with unhesitating. Nowadays, he is a famous college students who concentrate on planet’s fields. When I ask him about his achievements, he always tells me that he accumulates lots useful experience about planets when he was a child, and he can always use these expertises to help himself to overcome some issues that he was encountered with his learning. In his future, I believe he can make acquire more accomplishments in his own fields. Hence, Absorbing on one special program is far more important for modern students.
Indeed, to attempt kinds of activities can still bring advantageous effects to students. For modern students, most them do not have decidable ideas with their habits. Trying a great number of different programs, students will gradually discover which they really tend to pursue. Nevertheless, it is far more significant for modern students to devote enough time to formal study life. If they spend too much unreasonable time on other things, it will badly affect their grades.
Hence, I completely believe that students should concentrate on one activity.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 750, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[1]
Message: Use 'the' with the superlative.
Suggestion: the
... future. However, I realize that I make a worst mistake, since I do not have enou...
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Line 3, column 396, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...ly help them a lot in their future. For a instance, my little brother has always ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, hence, however, if, nevertheless, really, so, still, thus, as for, for example, i feel, in addition, such as, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 9.8082437276 153% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 19.0 11.0286738351 172% => OK
Pronoun: 72.0 43.0788530466 167% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 79.0 52.1666666667 151% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2792.0 1977.66487455 141% => OK
No of words: 560.0 407.700716846 137% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.98571428571 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.8645985582 4.48103885553 109% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.80673388515 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 260.0 212.727598566 122% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.464285714286 0.524837075471 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 868.5 618.680645161 140% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 16.0 9.59856630824 167% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 9.0 3.51792114695 256% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 28.0 20.6003584229 136% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.6040143744 48.9658058833 87% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.7142857143 100.406767564 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.0 20.6045352989 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.64285714286 5.45110844103 85% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 19.0 11.8709677419 160% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.164947864572 0.236089414692 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0542730005657 0.076458572812 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0580414968302 0.0737576698707 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.107882647768 0.150856017488 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0793359519796 0.0645574589148 123% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.1 11.7677419355 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 58.1214874552 88% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.66 10.9000537634 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.67 8.01818996416 96% => OK
difficult_words: 108.0 86.8835125448 124% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 10.002688172 120% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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