Needless to say, films and television sets, the souvenir of the twentieth century, are one of the most significant innovations of the last decades. However, it has long since been a matter of hot debates whether this novelty has a positive impression on our behavior or a negative effect, and by the same token, how it affects our lives? In my opinion television and films have a benign influence on human beings' behavior. I feel this way for two main reasons which I will explain in this essay.
The first an the most prominent reason that comes to my mind is that sports programs motivate people toward sports. On the other hand, a person who is a fan of a specific sport know the athletes which are involved in that sport and try to behave like them. For example, my brother is a fan of football games. He not only supports his favorite team by going to the stadium in all home matches but also he watches all the matches on the television. When I was a child I never liked football matches until my brother convinced me to watch a competition on the television. Although I did not know the players and the rules of the game, I enjoyed that match. After that day, I always followed the games of that team which I have watched its match. This stimulated me to be a football player, as a result, I started to do training and I am a football player at this time. All in all, in the light of watching just one football match, I have been motivated to act like an athlete and to start being involved in sports.
Secondly, television programs, especially films, are one of the best selections for free times. In the other words, after a tough day, people lessen their stress and behaves less violently by refreshing their morale by watching television programs. For instance, my father works for an organization as an employee. His work is really tough and he works twelve hours a day. When he arrives home, he is exhausted and does not speak to anyone, however, his first and the best option for increasing his soul is watching a film. He is a fan of comedy movies and laughs a lot while watching television. After a couple of minutes, he revives his spirits and starts to speak with us and telling jokes. Consequently, a few minutes in front of the television are like a curative drug for my father and refreshes his mind so as a result, he acts more kindly.
To put in the nutshell, I have personally subscribed to the view that television and films affect our lives and especially they have a positive influence by refreshing the tired brains and familiarize people by sports and athletes. It is the high time program producers spent much efforts to make their products much useful with informative contents.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 407, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'beings'' or 'being's'?
Suggestion: beings'; being's
... films have a benign influence on human beings behavior. I feel this way for two main ...
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Line 2, column 11, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
... will explain in this essay. The first an the most prominent reason that comes to...
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Line 2, column 11, Rule ID: DT_DT[1]
Message: Maybe you need to remove one determiner so that only 'an' or 'the' is left.
Suggestion: an; the
... will explain in this essay. The first an the most prominent reason that comes to my ...
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Line 2, column 447, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “When” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...ches all the matches on the television. When I was a child I never liked football ma...
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Line 4, column 276, Rule ID: MUCH_COUNTABLE[1]
Message: Use 'many' with countable nouns.
Suggestion: many
...s the high time program producers spent much efforts to make their products much use...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, however, if, really, second, secondly, so, while, for example, for instance, i feel, as a result, in my opinion, by the same token, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 9.8082437276 10% => OK
Conjunction : 21.0 13.8261648746 152% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 59.0 43.0788530466 137% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 59.0 52.1666666667 113% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2226.0 1977.66487455 113% => OK
No of words: 489.0 407.700716846 120% => OK
Chars per words: 4.55214723926 4.8611393121 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.70248278971 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.59211630061 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 248.0 212.727598566 117% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.507157464213 0.524837075471 97% => OK
syllable_count: 692.1 618.680645161 112% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 18.0 9.59856630824 188% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.289153961 48.9658058833 88% => OK
Chars per sentence: 96.7826086957 100.406767564 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.2608695652 20.6045352989 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.86956521739 5.45110844103 144% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 18.0 11.8709677419 152% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.115788375348 0.236089414692 49% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0312831466233 0.076458572812 41% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.033450598881 0.0737576698707 45% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0752601703984 0.150856017488 50% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0370890382306 0.0645574589148 57% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.6 11.7677419355 90% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 67.08 58.1214874552 115% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.11 10.9000537634 84% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.94 8.01818996416 99% => OK
difficult_words: 101.0 86.8835125448 116% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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