TOEFL essay:The twentieth century saw great change. In your opinion, what is one change that should e remembered about the twentieth century? Use specific reasons and details to explain your choice.
It is known that twentieth century was a period of ineffable changes in social, economic, political and technological aspects. It was a period of world wars and ,despite of this, it was also a period of great enhancements due to changes such advent of television, airplanes, optic fiber and spacial travels. Although all these were great advances, I believe that one that should be specially remembered is the advent of Internet. I feel this way for the following reasons.
Firstly, Internet was created during the period of cold war and was initially used for the purpose of facilitate communication and spread of military information. At that time the main mean of communication was telephone and computers were big machines used basically to store information. Over time, however, Internet was developed and its use advance for individual, educational and commercial purposes, not only governamental as previous. In other words, connectivity turned available for all.
Secondly, development of new technologies is possible due to the advent of internet. Furthermore, it has impacted the way we live and relate with others. As consequence of the enhancements in communication and internet we can observe the advent of smartphones, that I believe to be the great advent of twenty-one century.
Finally, Internet lead to the development of social medias that are great tool of communication, information and commerce used today. This is a great approach that companies are using to exchange information at real time and to stay connected with consumers. It is a great way to impact public and another rentable way to make advertisings.
To sum up, I strongly support that Internet development should be remembered as a great advance of twentieth century because it is impossible to imagine our lives without it nowadays.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 161, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...pects. It was a period of world wars and ,despite of this, it was also a period of...
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Line 5, column 314, Rule ID: CD_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun 'century' seems to be countable, so consider using: 'centuries'.
Suggestion: centuries
...ve to be the great advent of twenty-one century. Finally, Internet lead to the devel...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, finally, first, firstly, furthermore, however, second, secondly, so, i feel, in other words, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 15.1003584229 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 9.8082437276 31% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 27.0 43.0788530466 63% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 52.1666666667 79% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 8.0752688172 173% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1544.0 1977.66487455 78% => OK
No of words: 291.0 407.700716846 71% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.3058419244 4.8611393121 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.13022058845 4.48103885553 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.17511640393 2.67179642975 119% => OK
Unique words: 156.0 212.727598566 73% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.536082474227 0.524837075471 102% => OK
syllable_count: 497.7 618.680645161 80% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.7582246237 48.9658058833 89% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.933333333 100.406767564 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.4 20.6045352989 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.2 5.45110844103 132% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.150112880668 0.236089414692 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0501514440989 0.076458572812 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0559532981802 0.0737576698707 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0913586046226 0.150856017488 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0614190046923 0.0645574589148 95% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.3 11.7677419355 113% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.73 58.1214874552 75% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.52 10.9000537634 124% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.08 8.01818996416 113% => OK
difficult_words: 83.0 86.8835125448 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 10.002688172 120% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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