Attending college or university can change people personalities! There are many reasons for attending Universities. In the following paragraphs, I will shed some light on some reasons.
To start with, University makes a person, a professional. Not only he gains knowledge, but also learns to implement that knowledge practically. It happens that college makes him a master of the field and he eventually becomes a valuable human resource to the society, whose expertise can be utilized for development in society. I have my own compelling example, Before going to the university I had an ordinary job at a supermarket; i did not used to get a good salary and obviously, could not be of much help to the society. But after going to the university and eventually becoming a successful doctor, I am able to serve the society in much better way, now I work with NGO, do clinic in a government hospital out-patient department and also take few classes on personal development in a school. This give me much more job-satisfaction. Not only that but also more money.
Another advantage to be mentioned here is that, a person gets a chance to groom himself. To be more specific, in University there is diversity, from culture to personalities, from social class to accents, from habits to food options. Mixture of different culture means, getting the chance to meet different people, observing there behavior, dealing with them and hence a chance to learn from this all. Furthermore, living alone and managing finances is not easy, so this gives students the chance to be more independent, learning and striving for survival, by working part-time or even in university as TA or lab assistant. Hence, grooming curve goes steeply up during the years university. There is a study that proves this standpoint, a comparative study was done in US, comparing different aspects of same students in high school and then in university. The aspects which were compared were language use, manners, perspective towards life, transparency, and some other traits.
I firmly believe that going to university have some great effects on the students, and these effects combine together to bring a positive change in society and also leads to its development. I believe as educationalist it is our duty a to bring teenagers towards the idea of higher education. Of course, we want our society to grom in every positive aspect, don'"t we?
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, hence, if, so, then, of course, to start with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 34.0 43.0788530466 79% => OK
Preposition: 58.0 52.1666666667 111% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2018.0 1977.66487455 102% => OK
No of words: 400.0 407.700716846 98% => OK
Chars per words: 5.045 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.472135955 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.02226736077 2.67179642975 113% => OK
Unique words: 234.0 212.727598566 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.585 0.524837075471 111% => OK
syllable_count: 660.6 618.680645161 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 10.0 4.94265232975 202% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 64.8017218745 48.9658058833 132% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.210526316 100.406767564 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.0526315789 20.6045352989 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.63157894737 5.45110844103 67% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.88709677419 205% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.110261425491 0.236089414692 47% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0298322447116 0.076458572812 39% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0416683715187 0.0737576698707 56% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0641775932724 0.150856017488 43% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0260621158671 0.0645574589148 40% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.8 11.7677419355 109% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.7 58.1214874552 72% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 10.1575268817 125% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.95 10.9000537634 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.51 8.01818996416 106% => OK
difficult_words: 97.0 86.8835125448 112% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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