TOEFL IND writing 185-85 A foreign visitor has only one day to spend in your country. Where should this visitor go on that day? Why? Use specific reasons and details to support your choice.
It is critically vital that every country has its individual sights which are unique from others, and truly worthwhile to visit. In my opinion, if a foreign visitor has only one day to spend in my country I will recommend that they spend their whole time on the western coast of my country. I feel this way for three reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.
To begin with, it is noticeable that the natural sights made by plate movements are unique from other countries, which is the most characteristic scenery of my country. It is obvious that my country is located on the edge of two continents, and the occurrence of earthquakes are common in my homeland, though the movements of the continents contain the danger, they create gorgeous natural sights. For instance, there are plenty of mountains for mountain climbers to conquer, and the sights on the summit are gorgeous and unforgettable.
In addition, there is no doubt that the western coast of my country obtains various cultures of the aborigines, which are unique and meaningful for educational trips. Though my country is known for our various cultures from the diverse people of ancient settlers and immigrants, the isolation of the mountains lead to the diversity of aboriginal culture and divided into tribes that possess various cultures. By the way of illustration, there are more than sixteen tribes in the land that are merely thirty-six thousand kilometers per square, and all of their clothing, dishes, and religion are diverse from others.
Last on the contrary not least, there is no denying that the western coast of my country is the land that is clean and unpolluted. In most countries, after the industrial revolution, cities began to flourish, leading to the rapid development and exploitation of lands, which bring about pollution and toxicity to our Earth, and leave to animals no suitable place to live, consequently, a nontoxic land is extremely precious. To cite an instance, people mostly visit the west coast for devoting themselves to pure ocean water and observing those native species that live in the wild which might be endangered. and those precious clean environments that disappeared in many parts of the world.
In conclusion, I strongly believe that the western coast of my country is the most appropriate place for foreigners to get familiar with my country due to the unique natural landscape, the various cultures of the aboriginal tribes, and the unpolluted environment that was little left in the world.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 610, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: And
... in the wild which might be endangered. and those precious clean environments that ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, if, so, while, for instance, i feel, in addition, in conclusion, no doubt, by the way, in my opinion, on the contrary, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 15.1003584229 152% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 9.8082437276 31% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 19.0 11.0286738351 172% => OK
Pronoun: 42.0 43.0788530466 97% => OK
Preposition: 58.0 52.1666666667 111% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2112.0 1977.66487455 107% => OK
No of words: 418.0 407.700716846 103% => OK
Chars per words: 5.05263157895 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.52162009685 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77976018535 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 208.0 212.727598566 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.497607655502 0.524837075471 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 646.2 618.680645161 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 8.0 1.86738351254 428% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.6003584229 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 29.0 20.1344086022 144% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 65.7991687808 48.9658058833 134% => OK
Chars per sentence: 150.857142857 100.406767564 150% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.8571428571 20.6045352989 145% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.4285714286 5.45110844103 191% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0738097698018 0.236089414692 31% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0272109241368 0.076458572812 36% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.050000125745 0.0737576698707 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0497597959312 0.150856017488 33% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0583565975399 0.0645574589148 90% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.3 11.7677419355 147% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.5 58.1214874552 87% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 10.1575268817 132% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.6 10.9000537634 116% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.89 8.01818996416 111% => OK
difficult_words: 101.0 86.8835125448 116% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.6 10.0537634409 135% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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