TOPIC# 14 Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? People benefit more from traveling in their own country than from traveling to foreign countries. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Nowadays, travelling is a fairly popular activity to spend vacations, mainly owing to it has become more affordable than in the past decades. Whether is more advantageous do it in your own country or visiting foreign lands, though, is a matter of intense debate. As far as I am concerned, I firmly believe that to have the opportunity to be in new places is more enjoyable and favorable for all the family than domestic travelling. this position is based on two main reasons that will be analyzed more thoroughly below.
To begin with, visiting foreign cities improve the general culture of the youngsters while enjoy of an outstanding experience. Everyone that had known a new culture, can attest that do not exist a better way to acquire knowledge about a civilization that to life for some days surrounded of their culture and customs. An appealling example of that was my trip to the ancient Aztecan city of Teotihacan. when I was a freshman university student, thanks to an cultural exchange, I had the oportunity to spend two days with their nights in that amazing city. I thought to find ruins and remains of an prehispanic civilization, but in change, I saw a very well conserved city where you can feel the history still live in your skin. we arrived accompanied of a local native guide, which told us the histories of his ancesters. Those anecdotes, seeing how they lived, trying the food that they used to eat, hearing their music and learn about their culture and religion, was more beneficial for us than two or three years of lessons in a class room. Next, when we that magic and instructive experience was end, I wrote a my thesis of grade using all that cumul of knowledge acquired. The thesis was so exceptional that was worthy of the award “Best Historcal Research of the Year” given by the faculty of history of my university.
Another reason that support my opinion is that to know different places help us to be more tolerant and give away bad actitutes like the racism or the fear toward the foreigners. For example, last summer I was in the arabian city of Kabul. Before arrived, I was a little nervious due to the histories that I have heard about the arabic people were not quite positive. However, thanks to I was able to know local people and to speak with them I notice that they are exactly like us, with tha same fears and aspiration. Moreover I learn that not all are terrorist and that the Coral do not encourages the hate toward the occidental civilization, like many means of comunication want make us believe. that experience learned me that the more people travelling and relate with other culture, the more tolerant and less ignorant are.
In summation, I am of the opinion that visiting new cities and learning about different civilization is better to travelling aroung our own country. this is not only it enhance our culture and knowledge, but also it help us to open our mind and improve our morals in reffent to foreigner people. Therefore, if I have to give and advice to the new generations, it would be, travelling aroud the world and learn all that you can, because that definitely will improve us as human beigns.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, moreover, so, still, therefore, well, while, for example, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 25.0 15.1003584229 166% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 22.0 13.8261648746 159% => OK
Relative clauses : 26.0 11.0286738351 236% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 76.0 43.0788530466 176% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 71.0 52.1666666667 136% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2637.0 1977.66487455 133% => OK
No of words: 556.0 407.700716846 136% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.7428057554 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.85588840946 4.48103885553 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.67308727019 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 288.0 212.727598566 135% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.517985611511 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 854.1 618.680645161 138% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 20.1344086022 124% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 38.0913701426 48.9658058833 78% => OK
Chars per sentence: 119.863636364 100.406767564 119% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.2727272727 20.6045352989 123% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.31818181818 5.45110844103 79% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 13.0 5.5376344086 235% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.18298973999 0.236089414692 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0513358371744 0.076458572812 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0426143389798 0.0737576698707 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.112537184647 0.150856017488 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.036191180716 0.0645574589148 56% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.5 11.7677419355 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.56 58.1214874552 94% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.51 10.9000537634 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.51 8.01818996416 106% => OK
difficult_words: 128.0 86.8835125448 147% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.0537634409 119% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 30 minutes.
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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