Some people say that the Internet provides people with a lot of valuable information. Others think access to so much information creates problems. Which view do you agree with? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
it is unquestionable that the internet is the best and the most prized source of information on our hand today. Whether the access to so much information brights more issues that benefits, though, is a matter of intense debate. As far as I am concerned, I firmly believe that be able to count with this almost infinite amount of information is extremely positive to our society. this position is based on two reasons that will be analyzed thoroughly below.
Firstly, unlimited access to the information solidifies our democracy. it is vital for any citizen to know well who are the people that are trying to gain a political position. In this way, they could vote for those who are the most capable and honest, or those that represent best their interests. A compelling example of that was the last general elections in my city, Havana. one the most popular competitor for the position of major was Mr. Perez. he presented himself as a person concerned about the situation of poor people in a zone of the city very valuable for industrial corporations. To make a long history short, when he was finally elected, one of his first decisions was to move that community out of those lands where the companies desired to develop new industries. but, how the access to the information and the internet play a role in this history? The point is that if the people were investigated about him, would discover that his family was inversions in those companies, and consequently, they were known who is truly that guy and his real intentions.
Secondly, the access to the information improve our youngsters’ knowledge and prepare them to be better professionals in the future. For example, I remember when I was in the university, that I carried out a research for an assignment where I compared digital versus analogical devices. I began gathering information in the university library. As a result of the information collected, I lean to believe that in all aspect digital devices were superiors. Notwithstanding, a classmate suggested me to use the internet to find information more efficiently. when I did it, I notice that the superiority I was previously assumed was not completely correct. In fact, exist many fields were analogical devices are widely more used than digital. but, was wrong the documents I analyzed before? The short answer is not completely, the problem was that the books studied were out of date and the reality is quite different nowadays. As show this anecdote, the best is the access to the information, the more qualified are the professionals.
In summation, I am of the opinion that the opportunity to consult hundreds of different sources on the internet is clearly a privilege for our generation. this is because not only strengthen our democracy, but also enhance the new generations professional training.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, finally, first, firstly, if, second, secondly, so, then, well, as to, for example, in fact, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 36.0 15.1003584229 238% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 9.8082437276 31% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 24.0 11.0286738351 218% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 61.0 43.0788530466 142% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 50.0 52.1666666667 96% => OK
Nominalization: 18.0 8.0752688172 223% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2389.0 1977.66487455 121% => OK
No of words: 476.0 407.700716846 117% => OK
Chars per words: 5.01890756303 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.67091256922 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.01120928604 2.67179642975 113% => OK
Unique words: 250.0 212.727598566 118% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.525210084034 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 775.8 618.680645161 125% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 8.0 3.08781362007 259% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6003584229 121% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.2653890611 48.9658058833 78% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.56 100.406767564 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.04 20.6045352989 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.12 5.45110844103 94% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 13.0 5.5376344086 235% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 18.0 11.8709677419 152% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.13440309445 0.236089414692 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0378226206636 0.076458572812 49% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0320219981092 0.0737576698707 43% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0752142501767 0.150856017488 50% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0377636041401 0.0645574589148 58% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.7 11.7677419355 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 58.1214874552 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.84 10.9000537634 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.59 8.01818996416 107% => OK
difficult_words: 121.0 86.8835125448 139% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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