Some people don’t have easily life because of variety reasons include their family haven’t enough money or live in slum areas. One person has adequate situation can help these people for having better life through several ways. If I have enough budget for donating, I provide opportunity to initiate own small business for people in need. The following paragraphs will explain my two major reasons for this option.
First of all, I believe the proverb that it is better to learn fishing to somebody than give fish to him. If we provide food and home, these people haven’t ways to earn money and get normal life. Therefore, these people could obtain life they like by launch own small business. If people get food and home without any effort, they have little value to these precious things. While, if they attain those by own work and endeavor, keep their condition by two hand. Imagine one person that don’t fix initial demands, acquires jobs through which it can spend its expenses. This man enjoyed of every second of life.
Second reason I choose this choice is unemployment was decreased in our society by institute of small workshop for people in need. One of the basic issues in every society is unemployment. This problem induces increasing poverty and corruption. As a result, with this solution not only improve the people’s level of life but also growth quality of life in society.
To make a long story short, I strongly believe that instead of providing food, home or medical helps, we can help to poor people by starting their business. From one side, this option can help to independence of poor people, another side, cause to improve quality of level living in community.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 64, Rule ID: AFFORD_VBG[1]
Message: This verb is used with infinitive: 'to fish'.
Suggestion: to fish
... the proverb that it is better to learn fishing to somebody than give fish to him. If w...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, second, so, therefore, while, as a result, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 15.1003584229 26% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 4.0 11.0286738351 36% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 33.0 43.0788530466 77% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 52.1666666667 75% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1427.0 1977.66487455 72% => OK
No of words: 289.0 407.700716846 71% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.93771626298 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.12310562562 4.48103885553 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.46358034136 2.67179642975 92% => OK
Unique words: 172.0 212.727598566 81% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.595155709343 0.524837075471 113% => OK
syllable_count: 454.5 618.680645161 73% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 30.6672057522 48.9658058833 63% => OK
Chars per sentence: 83.9411764706 100.406767564 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.0 20.6045352989 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.52941176471 5.45110844103 83% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.151414915412 0.236089414692 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0484784102613 0.076458572812 63% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.032995562199 0.0737576698707 45% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0930101255772 0.150856017488 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0168965760347 0.0645574589148 26% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.3 11.7677419355 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 58.1214874552 93% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.08 10.9000537634 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.81 8.01818996416 97% => OK
difficult_words: 61.0 86.8835125448 70% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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