A town is given an amount of money to build an outside place. It can be either a garden for everyone or a sports field for the nearby high school students since the high school doesn’t have a sports field. Which do you think a better? Use examples and details in your answer?
Each town provides plenty of money to improve the quality of citizens’ life in various ways. While some cities spend money to build a garden for everyone, some create a sports field for the nearby high school students because the high school doesn’t have a sports field. It is so controvertible for them to determine a specific selection. In my view, they should establish a sports field for high school students. They boost effective education in high school, advertise more young people to come to this school, and offer opportunities for the students to be more healthy.
To begin with, utilizing bountiful money to construct a sports field for high school by a city progresses education to be more productive. Young people obtain their stresses such as grades, friendship, and future carries, and so on. It is so significant for them to ease their concerns to play sports with their friends and join sports clubs. However, there are not opportunities for them to strengthen their feeling if the high school does not contain the sports filed. They only have to concentrate on their studies in the school. Therefore, it is so important for a town to produce a sport filed for high school.
Secondly, high school incites more people who enter this school by a sports field where a town devotes money. Young people have several criteria to choose their future school. For instance, they view high school including the facilities where they can play sports. If the high school does not attain a sport filed, it sometimes does not provide a special course for the students who are very good at playing sports. As a result, high school decreases the plentiful amount of young people who encourage the school. Therefore, a town should build a sport filed for high school by their money.
Finally, a city enhances the health of high school students to generate sports filed. The high school students have to focus on just studies without an active place. Consequently, their health gradually worse because they only sit on the chair and listen to a lecture by teachers. On the other hand, once a city found sports filed for high school, they are capable of exercising their body. They also maintain healthy bodies with physical and mental.
To sum up, a town should expend much money on building a sports field for the high school. I surely believe that the investment provides the high school with enough education, appeal more people to come to the high school, and increase the health of each student.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, consequently, finally, however, if, second, secondly, so, then, therefore, while, for instance, such as, as a result, in my view, to begin with, to sum up, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 15.1003584229 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 29.0 43.0788530466 67% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 52.1666666667 92% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2089.0 1977.66487455 106% => OK
No of words: 427.0 407.700716846 105% => OK
Chars per words: 4.89227166276 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.54576487731 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.48036677525 2.67179642975 93% => OK
Unique words: 188.0 212.727598566 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.440281030445 0.524837075471 84% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 603.9 618.680645161 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 34.0791562233 48.9658058833 70% => OK
Chars per sentence: 87.0416666667 100.406767564 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.7916666667 20.6045352989 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.45833333333 5.45110844103 137% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.476899725599 0.236089414692 202% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.177182444938 0.076458572812 232% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.117439082962 0.0737576698707 159% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.330996765496 0.150856017488 219% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0671311391833 0.0645574589148 104% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.5 11.7677419355 89% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 71.14 58.1214874552 122% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 10.1575268817 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.79 10.9000537634 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.4 8.01818996416 92% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 86.8835125448 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 71.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.5 Out of 30
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