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A glance at people's attitude toward children's nurturing brings to the light a question that has been asked repeatedly, namely, whether it is more beneficial for children to spend their time on technology or playing outside with their friends or playing with simple toys. Some people holding the perspective that it is far more beneficial for children to play on technological gadgets such as computers, PlayStation, mobile phones, to name but a few. However, others stay at other side of the continuum, believing that playing outdoor activities or with simple toys is far more advantageous for children. As far as I am concerned, I am of the last group, believing that children who are raised by playing with their peers or simple toys get more benefits. The reasons to substantiate my viewpoint is elaborated upon hereunder.
To commence with, It is a developing social skill that comes as a consequence of playing with their peers. Nowadays the crucial part to succeed is to be able to communicate with other people more efficiently. A great way for developing and practicing such skills is playing with one's peers. As a tangible example, having played with his peers in our neighborhood, My little brother has broadened his social skill. he has learned how to communicate and cope with others more efficiently. Had not he spent his time playing with his peers, He would not have become a prosperous person in communicating.
Besides. with no doubt, children who get used to playing with simple toys can enjoy a greater sense of imagination. In today's world children are packed with a fantasy world in which there is no room for children to make imagination. Children who play with simple toys all the time imagine themselves as a new character or in a new environment, leading to the increase of their imagination. An example of mine can drive this notion home. Having used to play some game boards, I was obsessed with making an imaginary situation in which I was a leading businessman. So I had a better imagination compared with my peers who used to play video games called PlayStation. Had not played a game board, I would not have a powerful imagination ability.
Admittedly, playing and spending time with technology has some merits that none can deny. It is a wonderful way to get familiar with technology trend in society. However. I still claim that even though it will prepare children for their potential job opportunities in their future, it lead to decresing the children's communicating ability. So its pros cannot vanquish its cons.
Having considered all the reasons and examples into consideration. I believe that it is far more beneficial for children to play with their peers and play with simple toys rather than play or spend time on technology. Not only does it provide them a great enhancement in imagination ability, but also it nurtures their communication ability.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, however, so, still, no doubt, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 51.0 43.0788530466 118% => OK
Preposition: 65.0 52.1666666667 125% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 8.0752688172 186% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2421.0 1977.66487455 122% => OK
No of words: 486.0 407.700716846 119% => OK
Chars per words: 4.98148148148 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.69525374022 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.91282816198 2.67179642975 109% => OK
Unique words: 231.0 212.727598566 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.475308641975 0.524837075471 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 749.7 618.680645161 121% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6003584229 121% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.7661193863 48.9658058833 100% => OK
Chars per sentence: 96.84 100.406767564 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.44 20.6045352989 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.28 5.45110844103 42% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.5376344086 163% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 18.0 11.8709677419 152% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.110120195634 0.236089414692 47% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0356855373217 0.076458572812 47% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.049698700005 0.0737576698707 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0739667606693 0.150856017488 49% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0497662074711 0.0645574589148 77% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.7 11.7677419355 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 58.1214874552 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.6 10.9000537634 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.86 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 101.0 86.8835125448 116% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 10.002688172 145% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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