Universities and colleges play an important role in shaping the students' character. They do this through multiple academic and non-academic activities like sports and social events. Thus, I completely agree with the statement that these activities should earn an equal financial support as the classes and libraries. I feel this way for the following reasons.
To begin with, sports play an essential role in maintaining the student’s fitness physically and mentally. Through sports activities, students can get rid of all the negative energies and the stresses that face them and replace it with positive ones. In addition, sports help them to build new relationships with their peers even from different fields. This participates to a large extent in enhancing their academic performance due to the fact that researchers have proven that students who involve in sport or any social activities are more prone to success in their studies. For instance, during the freshman year at the university, I was a member of the college’s soccer team, which gives us a good opportunity to know new people and constrict long lasting relationship with my colleagues. Moreover, it made me more motivated to study, so, I gained a high degree in all the subjects. Thus, I believe that more money should be spent to improve the playground and to build new ones.
Furthermore, social activities can be beneficial to both the university and the pupils. So, colleges must invest more in this field. Studying the textbook will be worthless if the students are not able to apply what they learned to improve their society. For instance, during my second year at the university, our team won the national debate competition among other universities. That enables us to participate in the international debate competition which was held at Malaya University. So, we had the opportunity to compete with top colleges from all over the world. And again we win the first position. So, we succeed to make the name of our university well known around the globe. Since that time, more students have been attracted to our institution. Thus, the university should invest equally in both the academic and non-academic classes.
In conclusion, sport and social activities are as important as much as the classes and libraries.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 65, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'students'' or 'student's'?
Suggestion: students'; student's
...s play an important role in shaping the students character. They do this through multipl...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, furthermore, if, moreover, second, so, thus, well, for instance, i feel, in addition, in conclusion, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 38.0 43.0788530466 88% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 52.1666666667 96% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1938.0 1977.66487455 98% => OK
No of words: 374.0 407.700716846 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.18181818182 4.8611393121 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.3976220399 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.93404093107 2.67179642975 110% => OK
Unique words: 202.0 212.727598566 95% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.540106951872 0.524837075471 103% => OK
syllable_count: 601.2 618.680645161 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 46.1142132228 48.9658058833 94% => OK
Chars per sentence: 88.0909090909 100.406767564 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.0 20.6045352989 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.5 5.45110844103 101% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.209636394288 0.236089414692 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0597344828985 0.076458572812 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0661756513903 0.0737576698707 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.164801942757 0.150856017488 109% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0720481544668 0.0645574589148 112% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.5 11.7677419355 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 58.1214874552 93% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.47 10.9000537634 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.11 8.01818996416 101% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 86.8835125448 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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