As scientists claim, the name of the this era is information. Without a doubt, the information mainly come from the universities. Universities provide many things for their students such as social activities libraries etc. Some people supports the idea that university should fund whether social activities or sports or classes and libraries equally; others disagree. In my view, classes and libraries more important than sports and social activities and university should not receive equal financial support. The reasons as follows.
First, the main purpose of university students is education. Without a doubt, quality of education comes from greater library and good classes in the university. In terms of the increase the education quality of university, the board of university focus to found libraries and classes. For example, when I was studying computer science in Canada, my departman focused to build one of the biggest network class on entire country. Thanks to university president, my departman created that class. And In that class, I learned a lot about computer networks And now I am working in big network company thanks to that class. But what if my university build a big soccer pitch or something about social activities, the network class could not be builded. If I want to do sports I certainly go to out of university. My purpose to go to university is get good information from my area. All in all, purpose of university student getting quality education not social activities or sports etc. thats why university give more money to improve classes and libraries.
Second, universities do not need world class sport center or social activity center. Nowadays, almost every city has big sport center and entertainment center which builded by government. And these centers free for students. So, if city has already these centers, there is no point to fund these building in the university. University takes money from the government in order to provide research and good education for the society. For example, my older brother is athlete and at the same time he studies biology. He uses city complex for the athlete training and even though he is professional, he is no need great building in university. However, he needs big library to do good research in biology. So, if students want to do sport or participate the social activity, students can use the building which is provided by the government that is why university should not build world class such a activity centers, university should fund more to create big library or good classes.
Finally, some people opposes the idea that libraries and classes are important than sports and social activities and colleges or universities should fund them more.Not only students reasons to go to university is taking good education but also universities do not need quality sports center etc because of the cities already have. Every board member of the university should aware of the importance of classes and libraries and give more financial support for them.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: the; this
As scientists claim, the name of the this era is information. Without a doubt, th...
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...education comes from greater library and good classes in the university. In terms...
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...the network class could not be builded. If I want to do sports I certainly go to o...
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...on not social activities or sports etc. thats why university give more money to impro...
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...nt than sports and social activities and colleges or universities should fund the...
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...ersity is taking good education but also universities do not need quality sports ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, however, if, second, so, for example, such as, in my view
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 29.0 13.8261648746 210% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 43.0788530466 70% => OK
Preposition: 54.0 52.1666666667 104% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 8.0752688172 186% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2551.0 1977.66487455 129% => OK
No of words: 495.0 407.700716846 121% => OK
Chars per words: 5.15353535354 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.71684168287 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76767971688 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 212.0 212.727598566 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.428282828283 0.524837075471 82% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 810.0 618.680645161 131% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 28.0 20.6003584229 136% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 63.9226553528 48.9658058833 131% => OK
Chars per sentence: 91.1071428571 100.406767564 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.6785714286 20.6045352989 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.0 5.45110844103 55% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.5376344086 144% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 11.8709677419 143% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.261311418853 0.236089414692 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0821295444639 0.076458572812 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0897196913188 0.0737576698707 122% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.208267316293 0.150856017488 138% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0759149387681 0.0645574589148 118% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.7 11.7677419355 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 58.1214874552 93% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.29 10.9000537634 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.38 8.01818996416 92% => OK
difficult_words: 91.0 86.8835125448 105% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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