Some people may agree that the sports and social activities are of vital importance and need own the equal financial support like classes and libraries, they consider that the sports can give us health, and the social activities can help us build social networks, which are all valuable to the students' lives. While the above is true, I think the classes and libraries still need more financial supports due to the need of individuals and the college.
To begin with, for most students, the biggest reason why they take the colleges is to learn the useful knowledge. In this case, it's natural and reasonable that the classes and libraries have big financial support so that the students could have a great experience in most of the days. Meanwhile, if they hope to do exercise or expand their social networks, they can do it after the class just by themselves. If we focus on the academic learning, then it’s not necessarily to require the colleges provide so much financial support to the sports and social activities.
Meanwhile, most universities and colleges are mainly aimed to culture the knowledgeable man, not the socialists or athletes. I remember my college, which pay a big deal to construct a great swimming pool. On the other hand, the libraries’ seats are still not enough for students. I could imagine that is because the college must remove some money for the library building to support the swimming pool's construction. However, I guess few teachers and students would support this decision. In this case, we can see that if we require the sports and social activities have the same financial support with the classes and libraries, the money preparing for the later must decrease, which is eventually harmful for the users, the students and teachers.
In conclusion, the sports and social activities shouldn't get so much money like classes and libraries.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: shouldn't
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, may, so, still, then, while, i guess, i think, in conclusion, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 13.8261648746 130% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 43.0788530466 65% => OK
Preposition: 26.0 52.1666666667 50% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1595.0 1977.66487455 81% => OK
No of words: 318.0 407.700716846 78% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.01572327044 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.22286093782 4.48103885553 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.68395259253 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 158.0 212.727598566 74% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.496855345912 0.524837075471 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 478.8 618.680645161 77% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 20.6003584229 63% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 67.9552585144 48.9658058833 139% => OK
Chars per sentence: 122.692307692 100.406767564 122% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.4615384615 20.6045352989 119% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.23076923077 5.45110844103 151% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.246024403141 0.236089414692 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0813297981306 0.076458572812 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0626662262255 0.0737576698707 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.158981781569 0.150856017488 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.055043266348 0.0645574589148 85% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.4 11.7677419355 122% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 58.1214874552 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.13 10.9000537634 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.86 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 61.0 86.8835125448 70% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.002688172 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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