TPO-01 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?At universities and colleges, sports and social activities are just as important as classes and libraries and should receive equal financial support.Use specific reaso

Our appearance is an important part of our lives. Although this may not be ideal, our appearance often determines what people think about us and how they treat us. Some people believe that the clothes that we wear also influence our behavior. Others disagree. In my view, they do influence our behavior for two important reasons.

First, we choose different clothes for different occasions to tell us how to behave. When you want to be fun and active you wear clothes that supports that behavior, and when you want to be serious and formal you wear different clothes. For example, when I got ready to go to work this morning, I chose to wear formal clothing; it wasn’t an accident. I wanted to wear a shirt and tie to match the kind of work I was going to do. While working, I would often find that I would be a little more serious than normal because of the way I was dressed. A tie doesn’t give you a chance to move around very easily so you are stiffer. I stood up straighter and talked with more force because of this. When I saw my reflection in the bathroom mirror, my clothes clearly indicated to me that its time to work, be serious, and focused. As you can see,the clothes that you wear do strongly impact your behavior.

Second, your clothes influence the way people treat you and the way that people treat you affects your behavior. If you wear strange clothes, people may stare or look at you as if you’re crazy. Regardless of how you feel, you will probably be a little upset or bothered by this and behave accordingly. For instance, Ihad a friend in high school who always wore all black clothing. I thought he was a dark, serious, depressed person. Whenever we had to work together, we would always work independently and finish quickly. I didn’t try to make conversation with him and so he became very serious with me. One day, we had to do a big project together. It lasted several days; so, everyday we had to work together. After a while, we got pretty close because I realized I was wrong about him. After that we’d always talk. I know that if I had been more open to him he would have felt more comfortable talking to me sooner. This experience taught me that the way you dress really does influence how people treat you, which affects how you behave with them.

In sum, whether your clothing’s influence is intentional because you chose it for a specific occasion orits influence is unintentional because you react to how someone else treats you, what you wear has a strong influence on how you behave. That’s why we should all choose what we wear very carefully.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Discourse Markers used:
['accordingly', 'also', 'first', 'if', 'look', 'may', 'really', 'second', 'so', 'while', 'for example', 'for instance', 'kind of', 'in my view']

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.140794223827 0.229887763892 61% => OK
Verbs: 0.196750902527 0.158761421928 124% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0703971119134 0.0866891130778 81% => OK
Adverbs: 0.057761732852 0.046263068375 125% => OK
Pronouns: 0.14440433213 0.0685040099705 211% => Less pronouns wanted. Try not to use 'you, I, they, he...' as the subject of a sentence
Prepositions: 0.0920577617329 0.118717715034 78% => OK
Participles: 0.0126353790614 0.0351676179071 36% => Some participles wanted.
Conjunctions: 2.5819269477 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0361010830325 0.0309702414327 117% => OK
Particles: 0.00180505415162 0.00188951952338 96% => OK
Determiners: 0.0541516245487 0.0887237588012 61% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0162454873646 0.0209618222197 78% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0324909747292 0.0139019557991 234% => Maybe 'Which' is overused. If other WH_determiners like 'Who, What, Whom, Whose...' are used too in sentences, then there are no issues.

Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2632.0 2387.08602151 110% => OK
No of words: 470.0 408.028673835 115% => OK
Chars per words: 5.6 5.86048508987 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.65612321451 4.48200974243 104% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.310638297872 0.338922669872 92% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.221276595745 0.251872472559 88% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.153191489362 0.174417080927 88% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.102127659574 0.112833075102 91% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.5819269477 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 233.0 212.727598566 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.495744680851 0.524397521467 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
Word variations: 56.9705976132 59.2087087015 96% => OK
How many sentences: 29.0 20.6684587814 140% => OK
Sentence length: 16.2068965517 20.5533526081 79% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.1493861059 48.84282405 86% => OK
Chars per sentence: 90.7586206897 120.699889404 75% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.2068965517 20.5533526081 79% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.48275862069 0.644075263715 75% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.5376344086 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.54480286738 72% => OK
Readability: 38.3345561262 45.7405998639 84% => OK
Elegance: 0.615384615385 1.45489161554 42% => Essaays need to be developed more elegantly.

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.172154301058 0.300154397459 57% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.108483946591 0.103427244359 105% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.108235324178 0.0752933317313 144% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.381386785668 0.497263757937 77% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.163596249227 0.151897553556 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0545774166777 0.114077575197 48% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0503209145249 0.0781384742642 64% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.328588836719 0.336927656856 98% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.138012224659 0.067059652881 206% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.107363141544 0.210909579961 51% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0428617186844 0.0618886996521 69% => The ideas may be duplicated in paragraphs.

Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8870967742 109% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.86379928315 207% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.91756272401 163% => OK
Positive topic words: 11.0 8.42114695341 131% => OK
Negative topic words: 5.0 2.4623655914 203% => OK
Neutral topic words: 6.0 2.75985663082 217% => OK
Total topic words: 22.0 13.6433691756 161% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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