TPO-01 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?At universities and colleges, sports and social activities are just as important as classes and libraries and should receive equal financial support.Use specific reaso

In modern society, people thinks that one of the important key of bright future is education. So, children from undeveloped country are wants to study abroad because of their educational system. I partially agree and partially disagree with the statement that ' At universities and colleges, sports and social activities are just important as classes and libraries and should receive equal financial support.' for two reasons.

First, the main purpose of university and colleges is give students a high level education. So, university and colleges have to pay more attention and financial aid to their classes and libraries. For example, a child from undeveloped country wants to improve his or her knowledge so they go to abroad. But, if they could not receive a high education from their school they would be cancel school. Because of that, I disagree with the statement that is given first.

On the other hand, sports and social activities give a chance to student to communicate with others. No one could not live without any communication for example in university at least you must communicate with your teacher. Individual person could not live with only education, person must can communicate with others well. Communication will make you a right person and help you to be a member of society. Due to that, I agree with the statement that is given first.

In conclusion, sports, social activities, classes and libraries are all important to build a right intelligent person. I am confused with the statement for the reasons mentioned previously, so I partially agree and partially disagree with this statement.

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Average: 6.6 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...rtially disagree with the statement that At universities and colleges, sports and...
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...should receive equal financial support. for two reasons. First, the main purpose...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, so, well, at least, for example, in conclusion, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 24.0 43.0788530466 56% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 52.1666666667 67% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1366.0 1977.66487455 69% => OK
No of words: 263.0 407.700716846 65% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.19391634981 4.8611393121 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.02706775958 4.48103885553 90% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.83000101125 2.67179642975 106% => OK
Unique words: 140.0 212.727598566 66% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.532319391635 0.524837075471 101% => OK
syllable_count: 423.9 618.680645161 69% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 39.4126803833 48.9658058833 80% => OK
Chars per sentence: 85.375 100.406767564 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.4375 20.6045352989 80% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.0625 5.45110844103 93% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.303722089312 0.236089414692 129% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0978986899167 0.076458572812 128% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.132050862061 0.0737576698707 179% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.196844465883 0.150856017488 130% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0987316384616 0.0645574589148 153% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.2 11.7677419355 95% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.24 58.1214874552 95% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.53 10.9000537634 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.49 8.01818996416 93% => OK
difficult_words: 51.0 86.8835125448 59% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

More content wanted.

Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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