Physical and social activities at school can contribute into your academic success as well as impacts on your mental and physical health to an extend of enjoyment and relaxation. However, considering them equal to our classes and libraries is not what I strongly agree to. And monetary supporting these activities will not really aid in the development of the student's ability to compete in the growing society or simply to learn.
Firstly, our classes and libraries help us to learn different skills and gain academic knowledge that we need in order to build our career and support our lives with. Learning different subjects in schools and universities can only be done through a well structured process through class schedules, tests, exams, course work, teachers and assignments. If all of these are not in place then we will not be able to figure out whether we want to be doctors, accountants, engineers etc or even get educated enough to get a good job. For example, Abraham Lincoln, George Washington, Bill Gates and many more would not have been where they are now. They were only able to achieve their dreams by studying hard and they did this by studying in good universities that focused on their academic side more than sports or social activities.
Investing into hiring good teachers help students decide better on what they really want to do and pursue as a career. If my school was not able to spend well at the academic side then I would have not been where I am now. For example, when I was young, I always wanted to be a scientist however, as I grew up and learnt different subjects I changed my mind and wanted to become a doctor. Later, at college level I further learnt more subjects such as Accounting, Business and Economics. There, I was able to find out that I wanted to be an Accountant because I was always good with numbers and I felt that I will do much better in Finance. This was all achievable when I first learnt about different majors in the college and because the school I was studying in spent most on hiring good teachers, maintaining strict studying schedules and keeping well updated coursework. I was then able to get good grades in my finals. Also, i am positive that once I get my degree i will be able to get a job.
Secondly, not many people choose to be a sports person or even pay attention to social activities. Because in almost every school that we go to, most of them are competing with each other from an academic point of view. When it comes to organizing for field trips, stage drama, proms or even a sports game, many are only interested to attend those events for the sake of enjoyment. There cannot be a career out of it. Also, financially supporting them is not beneficial to students not even to the schools. For example, When I was in grade 4, my school was focused on training us for the independence day event that was being held at the stadium. We were trained every day by our class teachers, monitors, sports teachers and even by the principal. Because of this, all of the students were held back in schools for 2 hours everyday to practice and this went for like a month. All of the students were tired all the time and did not learn anything in class during that time. Therefore, our finals were postponed to a later date. Not only this but our principal also hired professional army trainers to train all the students. In the end we won the trophy as a reward but had no monetary gain. It was a complete waste of time and nothing else.
Physical sports do help us to maintain our bodies and there maybe some students who played sports more and became professional football players but most of them end up being football coaches earning much less than any other profession. Social activities, such as, being a part of a news letter society in the school, or being a part of an event organizing society, can help us develop friendship or earn extra credit hours but they do not bring any major benefit to the student besides serving the purpose of entertainment.
Libraries are another contributing factor to the development of knowledge and skills as it is a source of free books and materials that a student can access to do in order to learn. Investing into good books and computer software ( that manages paperless books ) is a quick and easy access for any student who cannot afford to buy books or to get help in preparing for assignments and increasing more knowledge.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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...s on your mental and physical health to an extend of enjoyment and relaxation. However, c...
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Suggestion: students'; student's
...ot really aid in the development of the students ability to compete in the growing socie...
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Suggestion: I
... to get good grades in my finals. Also, i am positive that once I get my degree i...
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...i am positive that once I get my degree i will be able to get a job. Secondly...
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Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'sports'' or 'sport's'?
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...econdly, not many people choose to be a sports person or even pay attention to social ...
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...ments and increasing more knowledge.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, first, firstly, however, if, may, really, second, secondly, so, then, therefore, well, for example, such as, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 39.0 15.1003584229 258% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 42.0 13.8261648746 304% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 18.0 11.0286738351 163% => OK
Pronoun: 78.0 43.0788530466 181% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 102.0 52.1666666667 196% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3669.0 1977.66487455 186% => OK
No of words: 792.0 407.700716846 194% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.63257575758 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 5.30495000532 4.48103885553 118% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.56238326896 2.67179642975 96% => OK
Unique words: 342.0 212.727598566 161% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.431818181818 0.524837075471 82% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 1134.0 618.680645161 183% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 8.0 3.51792114695 227% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 33.0 20.6003584229 160% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 59.8371987824 48.9658058833 122% => OK
Chars per sentence: 111.181818182 100.406767564 111% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.0 20.6045352989 116% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.21212121212 5.45110844103 77% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.53405017921 132% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 11.0 5.5376344086 199% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 21.0 11.8709677419 177% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.111651840398 0.236089414692 47% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0302306182863 0.076458572812 40% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0316028799938 0.0737576698707 43% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0671051078056 0.150856017488 44% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0351488139369 0.0645574589148 54% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.4 11.7677419355 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 64.04 58.1214874552 110% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.87 10.9000537634 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.56 8.01818996416 94% => OK
difficult_words: 137.0 86.8835125448 158% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 10.002688172 150% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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