Throughout our lifetime we make friends. It is both important to make new friend and to keep them as friends. However, if someone asked me which ability is more important I would say that the ability to make new friends is more important.
The first reason for my assertion is because new friends are more likely to be related to one's current field and share the same interest. If so, it is more likely that the friends one just made out with will able to help one's situation than anyone else. To illustrate this point, no one will doubt that friends before college are precious, but after high school everyone applies to different universities and majors. Hence, all of your friends will have different interests, which means there is not much for old friend's to help in one's field. My high school friend who majored in history cannot give advice to my computer science projects. On the other hand, friends I made at college are studying the same subject and can work with the assignment together.
Another thing is nowadays it is very rare for people to live in the same place they were raised. Most people move to cities when they get jobs or study abroad to get a degree. In that case, it is inevitable that people will have to depart with their old friends and make new friends. However, if people do not have the ability to make new friends it will be extremely difficult to adopt to their new places. To explain this with my experience, I was born in Nebraska and lived there until I was ten then I moved to Korean, now I am planing to study abroad after my undergraduate. So even in my short life time I moved two times and plan to live in three different locations. If I did not have the ability to make new friends my life would have been miserable.
To sum up, although it is undeniable that keeping one's old friends is important, new friends are more likely to share similar interests and give helpful advice also in today's mobile life it is important to know how to make new friends. Therefore, I would not agree that it is more crucial to keep old friends than it is to make new friends.
Essay evaluation report
The first reason for my assertion is because new friends are more likely to be related to one's current field
The first reason for my assertion is that new friends are more likely to be related to one's current field
or:
First, new friends are more likely to be related to one's current field
Another thing is nowadays it is very rare for people to live in the same place
Another thing is that nowadays it is very rare for people to live in the same place
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flaws:
1. No. of Words: 386 while No. of Different Words: 188
We are expecting:
No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
2. do more reading and know more new words, look:
difficult_words: 56.0 86.8835125448 64% => More difficult words wanted.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 22 in 30
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 2 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 18 15
No. of Words: 386 350
No. of Characters: 1687 1500
No. of Different Words: 188 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.432 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.37 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.243 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 106 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 79 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 37 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 25 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 21.444 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 7.373 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.722 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.377 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.538 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.144 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 223, Rule ID: ONES[1]
Message: Did you mean 'one's'?
Suggestion: one's
...ne just made out with will able to help ones situation than anyone else. To illustra...
^^^^
Line 3, column 534, Rule ID: ONES[1]
Message: Did you mean 'one's'?
Suggestion: one's
... is not much for old friends to help in ones field. My high school friend who majore...
^^^^
Line 5, column 383, Rule ID: ADOPT_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'adapt to'?
Suggestion: adapt to
...iends it will be extremely difficult to adopt to their new places. To explain this with ...
^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 602, Rule ID: LIFE_TIME[1]
Message: Did you mean 'lifetime'?
Suggestion: lifetime
...r my undergraduate. So even in my short life time I moved two times and plan to live in t...
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Line 5, column 677, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...n to live in three different locations. If I did not have the ability to make new ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, hence, however, if, so, then, therefore, another thing, to sum up, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 15.1003584229 159% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 43.0 43.0788530466 100% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 52.1666666667 98% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1725.0 1977.66487455 87% => OK
No of words: 386.0 407.700716846 95% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.4689119171 4.8611393121 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.43248042346 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.34300180121 2.67179642975 88% => OK
Unique words: 186.0 212.727598566 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.481865284974 0.524837075471 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 550.8 618.680645161 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.2244516955 48.9658058833 86% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.8333333333 100.406767564 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.4444444444 20.6045352989 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.66666666667 5.45110844103 104% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.260438217457 0.236089414692 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0996406249289 0.076458572812 130% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0890851383184 0.0737576698707 121% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.190834239273 0.150856017488 127% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0734180394752 0.0645574589148 114% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.3 11.7677419355 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 67.08 58.1214874552 115% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.65 10.9000537634 79% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.97 8.01818996416 87% => OK
difficult_words: 56.0 86.8835125448 64% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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