TPO-05 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?People today spend too much time on personal enjoyment-doing things they like to do-rather than doing things they should do.Use specific reasons and examples to suppo

it is often argued that today people like spending more time on what they love to do rather than should to do. I totally agree with this opinion and I will explain it in this essay.
First of all, if people do what they like to do, they will achieve their goals easily.It means that doing their best thing people can prevent any hazards and overcome any bariers.For example Steve Jobs, He worked enjoing his all workdays and was succeeded despite everything.
Secondly, doing your lovely things, people may be motivated and keep confidential in themselves all time. In other words, people will increce their economic wealth being motivated and feeling confident. For inctance Nowadays the Apple company is the best smartphone company in the world because of their confidence in terms of their productivity and motivational skills.
In conclusion, I strongly believe that people have to spend more time to their lovely things to achieve their goals and be more confident.

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Average: 2.3 (4 votes)
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, if, may, second, secondly, for example, in conclusion, first of all, in other words

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 15.1003584229 40% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 3.0 11.0286738351 27% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 25.0 43.0788530466 58% => OK
Preposition: 20.0 52.1666666667 38% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 2.0 8.0752688172 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 812.0 1977.66487455 41% => More number of characters wanted.
No of words: 162.0 407.700716846 40% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.01234567901 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.56762134501 4.48103885553 80% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.49184005908 2.67179642975 93% => OK
Unique words: 103.0 212.727598566 48% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.635802469136 0.524837075471 121% => OK
syllable_count: 247.5 618.680645161 40% => syllable counts are too short.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 7.0 20.6003584229 34% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 63.0956513913 48.9658058833 129% => OK
Chars per sentence: 116.0 100.406767564 116% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.1428571429 20.6045352989 112% => OK
Discourse Markers: 12.8571428571 5.45110844103 236% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.88709677419 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.308281383327 0.236089414692 131% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.144954932327 0.076458572812 190% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.154011837101 0.0737576698707 209% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.200487074292 0.150856017488 133% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.12807418029 0.0645574589148 198% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.7 11.7677419355 116% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 58.1214874552 97% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.07 10.9000537634 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.19 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 35.0 86.8835125448 40% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.002688172 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

More content wanted.
Minimum 250 words wanted.

Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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