TPO-40 - Integrated Writing Task Many scientists believe it would be possible to maintain a permanent human presence on Mars or the Moon. On the other hand, conditions on Venus are so extreme and inhospitable that maintaining a human presence there would

The reading and lecture both discuss presenting human at Venues. The author believes that conditions in Venues are extreme and inhospitable and he says that presence human there would be impossible. Whereas, the lecture refutes each of the point by presenting opposing evidence.
Firstly, the author points out that atmospheric pressure is 90 times higher than on earth. İt means the force of 100 kilograms will be pressing down in each square centimeter.This point is challenged by lecture. Lecture says that establishing the station the preassure would be the same like on earth.
Secondly, the author contends that Venues' surface lacks water and oxygen, but there are the plenty amount of carbon dioxide and sulfuric acid.The lecture refutes that by using chemical substances people can produce water.
Finally, the author states that only 60 percent of sunlight reaches to Venues is reflected back into space by the thick clouds. The lecture on the other hand opposists that cloud is not very sick it could reflect sunlight and station can use the sunlight into it.

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Average: 7 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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...esence human there would be impossible. Whereas, the lecture refutes each of the point ...
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...point by presenting opposing evidence. Firstly, the author points out that atmo...
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...pressing down in each square centimeter.This point is challenged by lecture. Lecture...
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...ssure would be the same like on earth. Secondly, the author contends that Venu...
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.... Secondly, the author contends that Venues surface lacks water and oxygen, b...
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...er and oxygen, but there are the plenty amount of carbon dioxide and sulfuric acid.The...
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...unt of carbon dioxide and sulfuric acid.The lecture refutes that by using chemical ...
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...l substances people can produce water. Finally, the author states that only 60 ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, firstly, second, secondly, whereas, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 10.4613686534 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 5.04856512141 119% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 7.30242825607 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 12.0772626932 66% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 12.0 22.412803532 54% => OK
Preposition: 20.0 30.3222958057 66% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 5.01324503311 80% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 900.0 1373.03311258 66% => OK
No of words: 174.0 270.72406181 64% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.1724137931 5.08290768461 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.63192868298 4.04702891845 90% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.54238739189 2.5805825403 99% => OK
Unique words: 109.0 145.348785872 75% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.626436781609 0.540411800872 116% => OK
syllable_count: 270.9 419.366225166 65% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.55342163355 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 3.25607064018 31% => OK
Article: 8.0 8.23620309051 97% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.25165562914 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.51434878587 66% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 2.5761589404 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 13.0662251656 69% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 19.0 21.2450331126 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.0726112425 49.2860985944 89% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.0 110.228320801 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.3333333333 21.698381199 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.22222222222 7.06452816374 116% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 4.19205298013 191% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 4.33554083885 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 4.45695364238 45% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.27373068433 94% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.261997629159 0.272083759551 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.103834536642 0.0996497079465 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0519837848937 0.0662205650399 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.14583111009 0.162205337803 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0256743971277 0.0443174109184 58% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.6 13.3589403974 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 53.8541721854 97% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.0289183223 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.71 12.2367328918 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.93 8.42419426049 106% => OK
difficult_words: 48.0 63.6247240618 75% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.7273730684 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.498013245 91% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.2008830022 116% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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