People have their own preferences and ways for their own personal enjoyments. Therefore, they also have different opinions about the issue whether people today spend a lot of time on personal excitement -doing things they like to do rather than doing things they should do. In my point of view, I support the idea that people do not spend much time for their own enjoyable things. I feel this way foe two reason which I will explore in the following essay.
First of all, it seems to me that people today are always in busy. Obviously, nowadays life is more complex than ever before. The standard of living and demands in life is so much greater than in the past. To adapt to this life and to be successful, people have to work hard every day even some people have to do their jobs on weekends in order to earn more money and to get more experience to be promoted and to meet the requirements of life. Therefore, people often feel short of time for their own wills and hobbies. My own experience is a compelling example of this case. I am a student and I have a part - time job. I spend all my day on doing my job. Some time I even do not have time to sleep.
Alongside the elaborated reason above, another idea that is noteworthy to consider is that people do not have the same a perspective about personal enjoyment - doing things. The same thing, you may do this for fun, but it can be a serious job for me. To be more specific, I am English learner. The best way for me to learn English is to listening to music or the talks of English speakers. One day, one of my sisters asked me why I did not spend time to study English. Why I spent so much time on listening to things. She did that because for her, listening to music is just a waste of time.
In conclusion, people have their own opinions about the question whether people today wastes a lot of time on personal enjoyment -doing things they like to do rather than doing things they should do. For two aforementioned reasons, I strongly believe that today people do not spend too much time for their own will and hobbies.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 53, Rule ID: WHETHER[5]
Message: Can you shorten this phrase to just 'whether', or rephrase the sentence to avoid "the question"?
Suggestion: whether
...n, people have their own opinions about the question whether people today wastes a lot of time on pe...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, may, so, therefore, even so, i feel, in conclusion, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 47.0 43.0788530466 109% => OK
Preposition: 53.0 52.1666666667 102% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1694.0 1977.66487455 86% => OK
No of words: 390.0 407.700716846 96% => OK
Chars per words: 4.34358974359 4.8611393121 89% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44391917772 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.36280682698 2.67179642975 88% => OK
Unique words: 167.0 212.727598566 79% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.428205128205 0.524837075471 82% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 533.7 618.680645161 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 55.7606306805 48.9658058833 114% => OK
Chars per sentence: 77.0 100.406767564 77% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.7272727273 20.6045352989 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.90909090909 5.45110844103 72% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.88709677419 184% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.432526787139 0.236089414692 183% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.127943008471 0.076458572812 167% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.159769503672 0.0737576698707 217% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.335782482356 0.150856017488 223% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.159576876975 0.0645574589148 247% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 7.9 11.7677419355 67% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 71.14 58.1214874552 122% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 10.1575268817 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 7.6 10.9000537634 70% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.5 8.01818996416 81% => OK
difficult_words: 50.0 86.8835125448 58% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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