TPO-34 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?Educating children is a more difficult task today than it was in the past because they spend so much time on cell phone, online games, and social networking Web site.U

Education plays an important role in our lives. It is believed that the more knowledge we gain, the more success we will have in the future. Therefore, to think about educating children is significant. Some people feel that educating children is a more difficult task today than it was in the past because they spend a lot of time on cell phones, online games, and social networking web sites. However, I do not agree with them, and think that teaching children has become easier than it was in the past. I feel this way because cell phones help students in their study subjects, online games teach students topics clearly, and social networking web sites inspire students to study hard.

First of all, students can get much information from the use of cellphones. They can ask Google a term, which they do not understand while studying in their cell phone. They also do not have to wait for their professors. I agree that students spend so much time on cell phones, but it does not mean that they are not learning. Cellphones can help them in many ways in their studies. For example, I always use my cell phone to get more information about the topic, which my professor is going to teach. This actually helps me to open my mind to many perspectives and understand my lesson more deeply.
Secondly, online games change education in many positive ways. There are various educational games, which help students to learn topics along with having fun. My own experience is compelling in this case. I am learning English, I play a vocabulary online through a game. This game helped me a lot to memorize new words. I also told my friends about this game. They actually improved their English faster than ever before.
Last but not least, social networking websites give students incentives to study. I agree that students spend too much time on these sites. However, these sites can help students learn many things. Students can form groups on these websites according to their interests. For instance, when I came to the United States, I had no friends in the U.S.A. Then, I joined a group of foreign students on Facebook. This not only gives me opportunity to enlarge my relationships, but also helps me to practice speaking English when I have conversations with them.
In conclusion, I strongly believe that educating children today is easier than it was in the past because children have become smarter with the use of cell phones, online games, and social networking sites.

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Average: 7 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 424, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... their English faster than ever before. Last but not least, social networking we...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, first, however, if, second, secondly, so, then, therefore, while, for example, for instance, i feel, in conclusion, first of all

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 63.0 43.0788530466 146% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 50.0 52.1666666667 96% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2060.0 1977.66487455 104% => OK
No of words: 427.0 407.700716846 105% => OK
Chars per words: 4.8243559719 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.54576487731 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.533895076 2.67179642975 95% => OK
Unique words: 202.0 212.727598566 95% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.473067915691 0.524837075471 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 631.8 618.680645161 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 20.0 9.59856630824 208% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 6.0 1.86738351254 321% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 27.0 20.6003584229 131% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.1344086022 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 45.4331991278 48.9658058833 93% => OK
Chars per sentence: 76.2962962963 100.406767564 76% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.8148148148 20.6045352989 77% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.51851851852 5.45110844103 101% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 21.0 11.8709677419 177% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.320523330696 0.236089414692 136% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0839855084577 0.076458572812 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.109354456217 0.0737576698707 148% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.201697330875 0.150856017488 134% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.134347602556 0.0645574589148 208% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.2 11.7677419355 78% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 64.71 58.1214874552 111% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.0 10.1575268817 79% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.38 10.9000537634 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.3 8.01818996416 91% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 86.8835125448 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.0537634409 80% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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