TPO-05 - Independent Writing TaskDo you agree or disagree with the following statement?People today spend too much time on personal enjoyment-doing things they like to do-rather than doing things they should do.Use specific reasons and examples to support

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TPO-05 - Independent Writing Task

Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?

People today spend too much time on personal enjoyment-doing things they like to do-rather than doing things they should do.

Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

it is of no doubt that the lifestyle of people have changed dramatically in the last century. this is mainly caused by the huge advancement in the technologies that was accomplished in this period. In this context, a reasonable person, looking at the lifestyles of the contemporary generations, would at the first glances think that they consume more work in entertainment than in the work they are ought to be doing. however, this is absolutely not the case in my opinion.

To begin with, analyzing the reasons that may prompt someone to think in that way, we would realize that the use of advanced technologies has made the life easier for most of the people, especially those who are very skilled and used to using them. this ease of life gives the incentive for someone to think that the people, given that they are putting less efforts that the older generations were putting, are spending only the minority of their time doing productive work. however, these people can do more productive jobs than what their grandfathers could do, exploiting the advanced the technologies available nowadays.

Furthermore, the world these days are moving faster in the sense of advancements compared to any other time before. In this sense, we can conclude that this wouldn't be the case if the people are actually spending more time on enjoyment-doing things than they do on work they are to do. In other words, if the world now is more advanced and more demanding for someone to prove himself in, and despite that, world seems now to be more productive, people must be doing their work more than ever.

Finally, it is true that now, people have more choices to do in their free time than people of the older generations had. that is, the advancement of many field such as, transportation and communication, makes it easy for someone to get more entertained in his free time than someone would in the past. this is a factor that may cause someone to think that people are spending much more time in entertainment than productive work. however, it is not the case, it is just the ease of their life that permits them to do this in their time, and someone should not be deceived by this means.

Finally, people now consume more time enjoying than people used to do in the past. however this time is not because they are taking from the time they are ought to be doing their work at, it is just the ease of life that facilitates many things for them, so that, they can do different things in their leisure time. this can be somehow beneficial for them in doing their work as they can take advantage of their rest time and get back to work more fresh and excited to work.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, finally, first, furthermore, however, if, look, may, so, no doubt, such as, in my opinion, in other words, it is true, to begin with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 30.0 15.1003584229 199% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 9.8082437276 153% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 19.0 11.0286738351 172% => OK
Pronoun: 67.0 43.0788530466 156% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 63.0 52.1666666667 121% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2194.0 1977.66487455 111% => OK
No of words: 473.0 407.700716846 116% => OK
Chars per words: 4.63847780127 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.66353547975 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.54606554304 2.67179642975 95% => OK
Unique words: 196.0 212.727598566 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.414376321353 0.524837075471 79% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 690.3 618.680645161 112% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 9.59856630824 156% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 20.1344086022 134% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 55.5499089787 48.9658058833 113% => OK
Chars per sentence: 129.058823529 100.406767564 129% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.8235294118 20.6045352989 135% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.35294117647 5.45110844103 153% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 14.0 5.5376344086 253% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.272897205562 0.236089414692 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.112989407488 0.076458572812 148% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.103327047183 0.0737576698707 140% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.179945149892 0.150856017488 119% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0686832030429 0.0645574589148 106% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.3 11.7677419355 122% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.53 58.1214874552 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.6 10.1575268817 124% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.93 10.9000537634 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.35 8.01818996416 92% => OK
difficult_words: 71.0 86.8835125448 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 12.5 10.002688172 125% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.0537634409 127% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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