The reading passage and listenning passage both discuss about online and traditional encyclopedias. The author claims that online encyclopedias are not valuable as much as traditional encyclopedias and refers three major problems to support its idea. However, the lecturer casts doubt on this claim and refutes each of the problems.
First of all, the reading passage metions that contributors of online encyclopedias have not enough academic credentials so the informations in the encyclopedias are inaccurate. The lecturer, on the other hand, opposes this point by explaining that errors of online encyclopedias can be corrected and edited in a small amount of time. By contrast, she states that traditional encyclopedias have never been perfectly writed also they contains some errors but correction of these errors take too much time. Hence, she states that in this point of view, traditional encyclopedias have disadvantage when they compared with online encyclopedias.
In the second place, the reading points out that the online encyclopedias are not safe due to hackers or vandals would fabricate information in the encyclopedias. Nevertheless, the lecturer refutes this belief by explaining that special editors have duty which is correcting the fabrications and corruptions of informations in online encyclopedias. This is a strong standpoint that contradict the author's point of view.
Finally, the author states that the information in online encyclopedias is too deep, and about trivial topics. By contrast, the lecturer refutes this point by explaining that there is not space problem for the online encyclopedias however, traditional encyclopedias have limited space so it has lack of diversity. However, online encyclopedias have broad diversity of information and it is strongest advantage.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 434, Rule ID: NON3PRS_VERB
Message: The pronoun 'they' must be used with a non-third-person form of a verb: 'contain'
...e never been perfectly writed also they contains some errors but correction of these err...
Line 7, column 388, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE
Message: A determiner is probably missing here: 'is the strongest'.
Suggestion: is the strongest
...e broad diversity of information and it is strongest advantage.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, hence, however, nevertheless, second, so, first of all, in the second place, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 9.8082437276 20% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 43.0788530466 56% => OK
Preposition: 31.0 52.1666666667 59% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1546.0 1977.66487455 78% => OK
No of words: 271.0 407.700716846 66% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.70479704797 4.8611393121 117% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.05734859645 4.48103885553 91% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.2784477515 2.67179642975 123% => OK
Unique words: 133.0 212.727598566 63% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.490774907749 0.524837075471 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 486.9 618.680645161 79% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.51630824373 119% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 9.59856630824 31% => OK
Article: 9.0 3.08781362007 291% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 20.6003584229 63% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.9330525725 48.9658058833 84% => OK
Chars per sentence: 118.923076923 100.406767564 118% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.8461538462 20.6045352989 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.30769230769 5.45110844103 171% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 11.8709677419 34% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.194882896754 0.236089414692 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0839270120445 0.076458572812 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0483773245838 0.0737576698707 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.132271331521 0.150856017488 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0493661578921 0.0645574589148 76% => OK
automated_readability_index: 15.8 11.7677419355 134% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 34.26 58.1214874552 59% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.5 10.1575268817 133% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.78 10.9000537634 145% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.07 8.01818996416 101% => OK
difficult_words: 59.0 86.8835125448 68% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 12.5 10.002688172 125% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 16.0 10.247311828 156% => OK
What are above readability scores?
We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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