TPO-08 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Television advertising directed towards young children (aged two to five) should not be allowed.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

" Watching cartoon network is part of a child's growing up days".Television is one of the media sources to get rid of boredom neither laziness of a child. One factor to take into considerate is watching television can help a child to divert his/her attention from their behavioral changes. I personally, disagree that television advertising towards young children (aged two to five) should not be allowed. Furthermore, there are advantages and disadvantages in letting the child to watch television advertising and can be permitted.

In my view, early stage of a child is the beginning of their learning process on their developmental milestones. Developmental milestones is a process of learning from birth to toddler stage. In which the child will learn how to walk,
play and talk. During their developmental milestones they started to explore, wonder and observe the surroundings. They begin to use their five senses and started to develop as well, also their way of thinking is much more advance. With the use of their five senses
( touch, smell, taste, hear and see) they can learn fast and adapt easily. Their five senses is one way for them to communicate better to other people. In our society, we encounter different types of children with motor developmental delay.However, in our society we cannot avoid to encounter children with disability despite of their ability to understand, they can able to communicate with their physical gestures by using sign languages and communication board. But, being disable is not a barrier for a child to learn. A child with disability can learn through the program that can teach and educate them as well. On my personal example, I have a niece who have motor developmental delayed whenever I talk to her she looks normal and easy to talk with, theirs no signs of behavioral changes she acts like a normal child. Henceforth, every child is different it's just depend on how the parent took care of the child.

Personally, the disadvantage of having the child to watch television advertisement is that, they will get in touch or will get addicted on watching sometimes, they make it a habit and never realize the time usage of watching is being extended in a prolonged of period of time. One way to limit them, is to educate them how to have control, in fact, children at this age are listening thoroughly to their parents. In our society nowadays, children are inevitable especially the changes on the technology. In my own personal example, I educate my son to limit the usage of television and computer. As a parental advice and golden rule: the only reason he can use the computer is for him to do his homework, whereas, watching television is only for weekends. It can also give adverse effect to children such as it might affect their studies that will lead to decrease their grades in school.

Furthermore, parental guidance is also one of the important thing to take into consideration. Giving them guidance will turn out a child to become a good listener and able to follow the rules made by their parents, Therefore, they will grow as a good and obedient child. As my conclusion, their are good ways and bad ways on permitting a child to watch television advertisement it's only depend on how the parents raise and bring them up to become a better child that includes self discipline and self control.

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Average: 7.3 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 76, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Television
... part of a childs growing up days'.Television is one of the media sources to get rid ...
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Line 3, column 339, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...vance. With the use of their five senses touch, smell, taste, hear and see they c...
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Line 3, column 390, Rule ID: AFFORD_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to fast'
Suggestion: to fast
...ell, taste, hear and see they can learn fast and adapt easily. However, in our socie...
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Line 3, column 447, Rule ID: ADMIT_ENJOY_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the gerund form: 'avoid encountering'.
Suggestion: avoid encountering
...sily. However, in our society we cannot avoid to encounter children with disability despite of the...
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Line 5, column 262, Rule ID: PERIOD_OF_TIME[1]
Message: Use simply 'period'.
Suggestion: period
...ing is being extended in a prolonged of period of time. One way to limit them, is to educate t...
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Line 7, column 290, Rule ID: THEIR_IS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'there'?
Suggestion: there
...d and obedient child. As my conclusion, their are good ways and bad ways on permittin...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, hence, however, if, look, so, therefore, well, whereas, in fact, such as, in my view

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 15.1003584229 146% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 9.8082437276 163% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 56.0 43.0788530466 130% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 79.0 52.1666666667 151% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2529.0 1977.66487455 128% => OK
No of words: 515.0 407.700716846 126% => OK
Chars per words: 4.91067961165 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.763781212 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.88854776182 2.67179642975 108% => OK
Unique words: 257.0 212.727598566 121% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.499029126214 0.524837075471 95% => OK
syllable_count: 802.8 618.680645161 130% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 55.0916029059 48.9658058833 113% => OK
Chars per sentence: 114.954545455 100.406767564 114% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.4090909091 20.6045352989 114% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.90909090909 5.45110844103 90% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.121622880314 0.236089414692 52% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0482789453162 0.076458572812 63% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0914605388059 0.0737576698707 124% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0874003268344 0.150856017488 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0602568409144 0.0645574589148 93% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.4 11.7677419355 114% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 58.1214874552 83% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.49 10.9000537634 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.27 8.01818996416 103% => OK
difficult_words: 114.0 86.8835125448 131% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.5 10.002688172 125% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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