Nowadays, computer technology is set to play a significant role in the people's daily life than ever before. According to this assumption that computer games are sort of time-wasting activities, the discussion has centered on whether children should be permitted to play or not. While I believe from broad perspective, it can be either beneficial or harmful, I tend to agree on such a view based on the following concerns.
The first point to support this is that advances in computer technology especially some specific programs can put children at different risks in psychological term. To begin with, having been exposure on violent video games not only has made children more aggressive but also it caused growing rate in criminal behavior. In fact, recent studies have revealed that there is a direct correlation between observing violence in mass media or computer games and the juvenile delinquency. Even though some developed countries have banned these computer games, the advent of internet has facilitated the accessibility of them.
Another drawback of computer games can be the long-term impacts that have stemmed from its excessive use. Indeed, children are susceptible to contract serious disease unless they regularly have involved in physical activities and social interactions. However, having been sat sequential hours in front of video games deteriorate the health and might bring about lack in eye-vision or obesity. In addition, immersed in computer games also might cause sense of loneliness or isolated and make children to be indifferent with the surrounding environments
On the other side, both parents and instructors can take advantage from educational games. In fact, there has been a wide range of useful games which have been programmed to enhance students' deep understanding and other thinking skills. Monitored use of these games not only flourish mental dexterities but also can be regarded as happy balance between the pressure of campus and off-campus life.
From what have been discussed, the disadvantage of computer games can outweigh it redeeming feature. As it was stated, deterioration in mental and physical aspects of children life style such as obesity, more aggression or sense of loneliness are its demerits. However, erratic use of these games as an educational instruments should not be overlooked.
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'first', 'however', 'if', 'look', 'so', 'while', 'in addition', 'in fact', 'sort of', 'such as', 'to begin with']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.268018018018 0.229887763892 117% => OK
Verbs: 0.173423423423 0.158761421928 109% => OK
Adjectives: 0.101351351351 0.0866891130778 117% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0427927927928 0.046263068375 92% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0292792792793 0.0685040099705 43% => OK
Prepositions: 0.121621621622 0.118717715034 102% => OK
Participles: 0.0698198198198 0.0351676179071 199% => Less participles wanted.
Conjunctions: 2.88798037903 2.67179642975 108% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0247747747748 0.0309702414327 80% => OK
Particles: 0.00225225225225 0.00188951952338 119% => OK
Determiners: 0.0675675675676 0.0887237588012 76% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0247747747748 0.0209618222197 118% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.00675675675676 0.0139019557991 49% => Some subClauses wanted starting by 'Which, Who, What, Whom, Whose.....'
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2595.0 2387.08602151 109% => OK
No of words: 407.0 408.028673835 100% => OK
Chars per words: 6.37592137592 5.86048508987 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.49157444576 4.48200974243 100% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.390663390663 0.338922669872 115% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.339066339066 0.251872472559 135% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.267813267813 0.174417080927 154% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.149877149877 0.112833075102 133% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.88798037903 2.67179642975 108% => OK
Unique words: 231.0 212.727598566 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.567567567568 0.524397521467 108% => OK
Word variations: 66.7059954882 59.2087087015 113% => OK
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6684587814 97% => OK
Sentence length: 20.35 20.5533526081 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.6968941515 48.84282405 100% => OK
Chars per sentence: 129.75 120.699889404 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.35 20.5533526081 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.65 0.644075263715 101% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.5376344086 132% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.54480286738 36% => OK
Readability: 54.2566339066 45.7405998639 119% => OK
Elegance: 1.87155963303 1.45489161554 129% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.490078682403 0.300154397459 163% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.0736789999679 0.103427244359 71% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.048317465191 0.0752933317313 64% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.508688574216 0.497263757937 102% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.0968494488615 0.151897553556 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.181473556262 0.114077575197 159% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.117055744121 0.0781384742642 150% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.327793328806 0.336927656856 97% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0401717702661 0.067059652881 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.341190667168 0.210909579961 162% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.298002746835 0.0618886996521 482% => Less connections among paragraphs
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8870967742 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 3.86379928315 259% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.91756272401 20% => More neutral sentences wanted.
Positive topic words: 9.0 8.42114695341 107% => OK
Negative topic words: 9.0 2.4623655914 366% => OK
Neutral topic words: 1.0 2.75985663082 36% => OK
Total topic words: 19.0 13.6433691756 139% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 86.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 26.0 Out of 30
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