There is no shortage of debate about whether it is better to play computer games for children or to avoid spending time on this virtual world. As far as I am concerned, computer games are not harmful as they are though; even they have so many benefits. Recent researches show that if children spend three hours on computer, they become more relevant to technology in their adult ages. When above reasons are taken into account, playing computer games is preferable for young people particularly in some terms.
Firstly, we call this century as technology age and spending time on computer is nearly a must for children. We are witnessed the digital transition but zero generation was born into a completely digital world. Forbidding computer games sounds like forbidding breathing for them. For instance, think about an alone child whose friends are playing computer games all the time. When this child grow up, probably s/he will feel lonely due to the fact that s/he lived another life with his/her generation. Of course spending 12 hours per day is harmful for young people but forbidding computer games is outdated for this term.
Secondly, computer games help people to create a social enviroment that players can just communicate. Why do some adults think playing computer games means being anti-social? Actually there are tons of people who know themselves from these games. I can even find a roommate from computer games, so did I. Yes, I am living with a computer game addict who I met from a mobile game. In this age, friendships are becoming digital too like everything else.
To sum up, it is obvious that peoples fear about computer games are expired. It is the time of Internet-based things and of course children are the biggest users of them. If parents try to do not allow playing computer games for their children, they can unbalance their future life. Although parents believe that this is for childrens favor, they might be wrong in their opinions. Dont forget that we call it the “computer age”!
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, but, first, firstly, if, second, secondly, so, for instance, of course, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 15.1003584229 139% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 13.8261648746 36% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 41.0 43.0788530466 95% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 52.1666666667 67% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1692.0 1977.66487455 86% => OK
No of words: 342.0 407.700716846 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.94736842105 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.30037696126 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.55449815532 2.67179642975 96% => OK
Unique words: 193.0 212.727598566 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.56432748538 0.524837075471 108% => OK
syllable_count: 523.8 618.680645161 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 24.5618290588 48.9658058833 50% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 80.5714285714 100.406767564 80% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.2857142857 20.6045352989 79% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.33333333333 5.45110844103 79% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.85842293907 207% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.214202724504 0.236089414692 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0721238564335 0.076458572812 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0559404563389 0.0737576698707 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.147258906142 0.150856017488 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0224299501473 0.0645574589148 35% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.0 11.7677419355 85% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 58.1214874552 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 10.1575268817 83% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.13 10.9000537634 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.66 8.01818996416 96% => OK
difficult_words: 70.0 86.8835125448 81% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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