The academic knowledge is very crucial for humankind since all of us have seen many people who afford their life's expenses with the knowledge they have. If it is asked that it is better to have a broad knowledge of many academic subjects than to specialize in one specific subject, although many prefer to have broad knowledge, in my point of view, being professional in one subject is more useful for two important reasons.
The main reason is that the person who is an expert in one field can earn much more money than others. This means that because there are few people who are skilled in specific fields the person who has this ability can earn a lot of money since there is nobody else to solve the problem which he or she can solve. For example, I was going to my office yesterday and suddenly I understood that my car has broken down. So, I was forced to call a repairman but nobody knows how to fix my car and all of the repairmen pointed a man named Jeffry. Finally, I could find him and asked him to fix my car, at that time I recognized that my car's problem was not that essential. When I wanted to pay him he asked a huge amount of money but I had no other choice because he was the only one. As you can see, that man couldn't have earned that much money, if he wasn't an expert in his field.
The other reason is that people can be more self-confident when they become an expert in their field. In other words, professionals always attract the admirations of the people and people respect them since there is no defect in what they perform. For instance, in the memory that I told you the repairman had a high level of self-confidence. When I wanted to pay him I respected and admired him because he was really sophisticated and skilled in his profession. As it is obvious, the repairman wouldn't have received those admirations, if he couldn't fix my car skillfully.
In sum, in spite of the fact that some may prefer to have broad knowledge, I think it is better to be skillful in one specific subject. Not only it will help you to earn more money, but also it can improve the sense of self-confidence in your spirit.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: all the
... but nobody knows how to fix my car and all of the repairmen pointed a man named Jeffry. F...
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... the only one. As you can see, that man couldnt have earned that much money, if he wasn...
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...ldnt have earned that much money, if he wasnt an expert in his field. The other re...
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...ession. As it is obvious, the repairman wouldnt have received those admirations, if he ...
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Suggestion: couldn't
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, if, may, really, so, as for, for example, for instance, i think, in other words, in spite of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 15.1003584229 139% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 20.0 11.0286738351 181% => OK
Pronoun: 64.0 43.0788530466 149% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 43.0 52.1666666667 82% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1741.0 1977.66487455 88% => OK
No of words: 398.0 407.700716846 98% => OK
Chars per words: 4.3743718593 4.8611393121 90% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.46653527281 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.51520087639 2.67179642975 94% => OK
Unique words: 186.0 212.727598566 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.467336683417 0.524837075471 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 553.5 618.680645161 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 8.0 3.51792114695 227% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.4071425411 48.9658058833 93% => OK
Chars per sentence: 108.8125 100.406767564 108% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.875 20.6045352989 121% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.0 5.45110844103 128% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.198828576897 0.236089414692 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0653494462805 0.076458572812 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.099853744247 0.0737576698707 135% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.159523355226 0.150856017488 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.139352878909 0.0645574589148 216% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.6 11.7677419355 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 64.04 58.1214874552 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.36 10.9000537634 77% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.17 8.01818996416 89% => OK
difficult_words: 59.0 86.8835125448 68% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.002688172 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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