TPO 14 independent
It goes without saying that in such a sophisticated world where people are putting all their efforts so as to have more pleasure and enjoyable time, traveling is one of the rational tasks. No one can deny the effect of traveling on people’s lives. One of the most contentious issues having been brought up in the past decades is whether traveling to foreign countries is beneficial or going around one’s own country. Some people hold the view that going abroad is more beneficiary nowadays. However, the majority of people contradict this idea and look at this concept through a different lens. As a matter of fact, I subscribe to the outlook of those people since I contend that traveling around our own country and vicinity is not only cost and time effective but also it gives a good opportunity to find out more information about your own country. In the subsequent paragraphs, I will delve into some conspicuous reasons to elaborate on my perspective.
The first exquisite reason to be mention is that although traveling abroad would be really interesting and exhilarating, not everyone could afford it. No one can cast the shadow on the fact that traveling in own country does not need to exchange money and expense a lot on it. Indeed, people’s tight life does not let them to experience foreign trips. Take for example a person who would like to travel and have fun by going to a trip. If he go on the trip which is really costly and time-consuming, he would run out of money in the middle of trip and he would not have a pleasure time. A noteworthy refreshingly intelligent statistics revealed by social scientists conducted in our country, indicates that 80% of people with mediate income tend to travel inside their own country instead paying a pool of money for going abroad to have fun. The less the trip expense is, the more fun people have.
Another subtle point which deserves some words here is that people can familiarize with a plenty of picturesque landscapes and striking sightseeing in their country. There has been a great deal of research into the potential benefits of tourism attractions showing that people who travel to foreign countries do not aware of their own country’s attractions. Furthermore, there are copious places where have not been discovered as an attraction. If these places become known, they will attract the public attention and become developed. An example can shed light on this issue. For instance, there used to be a historical place in our town which was unknown until last year. In last summer, some groups of passengers camped there and asked native people about the place. After a while more people traveled there and eventually this place became famous and draw more than hundreds of people. The economic thrived there and this place became one of the picturesque places in all over the country. Taking into account this merit illustrates the profound effect of tourism and travelling.
To put it briefly, contemplating all factors and reasons, one soon realizes that traveling to one’s country is more beneficial than going aboard due to the affordable situation and the chance to be familiar with your own country. Consequently, I recommend everybody that should travel all parts of his or her country.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
It goes without saying that in such a so...
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Line 1, column 105, Rule ID: SO_AS_TO[1]
Message: Use simply 'to'
Suggestion: to
...re people are putting all their efforts so as to have more pleasure and enjoyable time, ...
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Line 3, column 448, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'goes'.
Suggestion: goes
... and have fun by going to a trip. If he go on the trip which is really costly and ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, briefly, but, consequently, first, furthermore, however, if, look, really, so, while, as to, for example, for instance, as a matter of fact
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 15.1003584229 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 21.0 13.8261648746 152% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.0286738351 154% => OK
Pronoun: 44.0 43.0788530466 102% => OK
Preposition: 77.0 52.1666666667 148% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2743.0 1977.66487455 139% => OK
No of words: 553.0 407.700716846 136% => OK
Chars per words: 4.96021699819 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.84932490483 4.48103885553 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75905755443 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 284.0 212.727598566 134% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.51356238698 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 851.4 618.680645161 138% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 7.0 3.08781362007 227% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 20.6003584229 126% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 59.1837475692 48.9658058833 121% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.5 100.406767564 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.2692307692 20.6045352989 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.57692307692 5.45110844103 102% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0 0.236089414692 0% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0 0.076458572812 0% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0737576698707 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0 0.150856017488 0% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0645574589148 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.6 11.7677419355 107% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 58.1214874552 101% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.49 10.9000537634 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.99 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 116.0 86.8835125448 134% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 30 minutes.
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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