Undoubtedly, people always have been seeking for the fact that their children become successful and prosperous in their educational tasks. Motivation is one of the most required factors to be developed in not only educational fairs but also every actions people do in their life. No one can deny the effects of incentive either mentally or physically on the paving success. In this regard, one contentious question arises is whether these incentives should be tangible such as paying money or something motivating them mentally such as rewarding children by letting them play a game or read a book. As a matter of fact, I believe parents should consider both and according to the circumstances decide which one to do. In what follows, I explore my double-side stance on this issue.
First off, encouraging students by giving them some money as a reward would be a great motivation to try harder, particularly for those who are not so fanatical about studying and doing assignments. For instance, by advance in technology and advent of numerous amount of distractions including online games and social networks such as Web sites, children have become so reluctant to do their school works and study their courses. Thus, paying them would be a good idea to stimulate them to put all their efforts in order to get a good mark and then be rewarded. In addition, by attempting hard, they are more likely to get accustomed to studying and after several time getting good grades and being rewarded, they become self-motivation and they would study by their own not for the sake of money or parents forces.
On the other hand, if they are permanently be rewarded, this method will be so repetitive for them and at last lose its influence. So, parents should take into account this fact to make their rewards more variable and promise them other things including intellectual rewards. For instance, some students have enthusiastic toward reading some well-known novels such as Harry Potter or going to see a movie which they've heard a lot about. In such occasions, they should be promised this kind of things to be more motivated. What I mean is, experiencing new tasks might be more encouraging for them and make them harder worker. Not only do students do their homework better, but also it is a good opportunity to give them more information about general subjects. Besides, it is a reliable way for them to be sure that their parents consider them and pay attention to them.
To put it briefly, contemplating both sides, one soon realizes that parents should consider rewarding both money and other favorite things for children to become incentive enough to try harder. Moreover, not only they learn their stuff better but also they can learn other knowledge. So, I recommend parents that pay some money as motivator with having an eye to students' desires.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 21, Rule ID: ADVERB_WORD_ORDER[7]
Message: The adverb 'always' is usually put between 'have' and 'been'.
Suggestion: have always been
Undoubtedly, people always have been seeking for the fact that their childre...
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Line 5, column 412, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: they've
...ry Potter or going to see a movie which theyve heard a lot about. In such occasions, t...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, briefly, but, first, if, moreover, so, then, thus, well, for instance, i mean, in addition, kind of, such as, as a matter of fact, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 15.1003584229 139% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 23.0 13.8261648746 166% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 51.0 43.0788530466 118% => OK
Preposition: 53.0 52.1666666667 102% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2381.0 1977.66487455 120% => OK
No of words: 482.0 407.700716846 118% => OK
Chars per words: 4.9398340249 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.68556276237 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.69591819185 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 248.0 212.727598566 117% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.514522821577 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 738.9 618.680645161 119% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.6686316831 48.9658058833 106% => OK
Chars per sentence: 119.05 100.406767564 119% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.1 20.6045352989 117% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.15 5.45110844103 150% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 18.0 11.8709677419 152% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.205584734222 0.236089414692 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0680293554731 0.076458572812 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0362569068395 0.0737576698707 49% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.136754438283 0.150856017488 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0472514674574 0.0645574589148 73% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.9 11.7677419355 118% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 58.1214874552 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.67 10.9000537634 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.14 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 101.0 86.8835125448 116% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 10.002688172 145% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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