Traveling is the important part of our lives. Some people believe that traveling in their own country is and some disagree. In my view, traveling to abroad have many advantage. We both familiar with other cultures and can visit new places. I feel this way for two significant reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.
To begin with, when we visit other country we deal with new people with novel cultures. Every country have specific culture and that influence on people's behavior. For example, when I was a university student, I studied in abroad and I learned a lot about that. people in United States had culture that they were open arming and friendly and had a nice encounter with foreigner like me. I did not feel I was a stranger and that was very interesting for me. In contrast, in my country we hardly connect with people come from abroad.And by traveling in foreign country I noticed that important problem in my country.So, visiting new country can be constructive for people and they can revise their negative behavor, too. This example illustrate that new country is equal to new customs and culture.
Secondly, we can see new places. Every country have museums and places that indicate symbol of a country. It is true that traveling in other country is costly but their memory can be amazing for us. When I traveled to France two years ago, I was shocked from historical monuments in France. In contrast, when we travel in own country everything is ordinary and boring and do not novelty for us. It is not only boring but also costly.
In conclusion, I strongly believe traveling to foreign country have more advantage because we can familiar with other culture and can visit new places. Traveling to new country cause make good memory for us and familiar with other country have positive impact on our behavior, also.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, second, secondly, so, for example, i feel, in conclusion, in contrast, in my view, it is true, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 46.0 43.0788530466 107% => OK
Preposition: 37.0 52.1666666667 71% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 8.0752688172 12% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1538.0 1977.66487455 78% => OK
No of words: 320.0 407.700716846 78% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.80625 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.22948505376 4.48103885553 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.51864919153 2.67179642975 94% => OK
Unique words: 156.0 212.727598566 73% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.4875 0.524837075471 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 492.3 618.680645161 80% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 49.2366733239 48.9658058833 101% => OK
Chars per sentence: 76.9 100.406767564 77% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.0 20.6045352989 78% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.15 5.45110844103 113% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 13.0 5.5376344086 235% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.240523564139 0.236089414692 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.078868314237 0.076458572812 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0599769376061 0.0737576698707 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.169832345712 0.150856017488 113% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0110581073257 0.0645574589148 17% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.2 11.7677419355 78% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 58.1214874552 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 10.1575268817 83% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.32 10.9000537634 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.83 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 69.0 86.8835125448 79% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 5.5 10.002688172 55% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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