Financially responsible adults are usually of financial independence, which is a prominent character for modern people. Some people claim that children should learn to manage their own money when they are young so they could become financially responsible adults in the future and I agree with it.
To begin with, children can learn how to save money, how to distribute money and even how to make profits from their money by managing their own money. First, save money. Since children are too young to get an official job, most of their money comes from their parents, which is limited. But if they want to buy a toy which the price is much beyond what they can afford, they would save every dollar they get from their parents in order to purchase the dream toy. Second, distribute money. Managing their own money could cultivate children’s ability of making feasible financial plans and allocating money wisely. Because they need to decide if they should spend money on something first and how much should spend. Third, make profits from money. When money becomes a limited resource to children, they are likely to think how to make it more with what they already have. No matter from the bank’s interests or making some small deals with their friends, with help of their parents, they would learn a lot from managing their own money.
Then, children’s cognition and behavior patterns have huge influence on their future life. Habits formed at their young age still exist when they become adults. With proper guidance, good habits of managing money which mentioned above would become good financial habits when they grow up and play a essential role. Moreover, the sooner good habits are developed, the more benefits people could get in the future, there are many young adults are not financially independent or spend their money randomly, if they have learned how to manage their money when their were young, the situation would be different.
Last, what children learned when they were managing their money contribute them to become financially responsible adults. A financially responsible adult prefers saving money for achieving bigger goal rather than spending as much as he or she has, a financially responsible adult knows how much should be for emergence, how much should be used for investment and how much should for spoiling himself/herself or for helping others. And a financially responsible adult would like to make more profits from his or her assets, because the amount of salary is limited, just like the money from parents when he or she is young, a variety of investments would be necessary.
All in all, with parents’ help and correct instructions, children could cultivate the awareness of saving money, learn how to distribute money and make profits from money, all their good money management habits could affect their future life which benefit them to become financially responsible adults. Therefore, children should learn to manage their own money at young age.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, moreover, second, so, still, then, therefore, third, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 21.0 9.8082437276 214% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 48.0 43.0788530466 111% => OK
Preposition: 57.0 52.1666666667 109% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2528.0 1977.66487455 128% => OK
No of words: 494.0 407.700716846 121% => OK
Chars per words: 5.11740890688 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.71445763274 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.56195662741 2.67179642975 96% => OK
Unique words: 211.0 212.727598566 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.427125506073 0.524837075471 81% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 762.3 618.680645161 123% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 9.59856630824 31% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 83.6456731664 48.9658058833 171% => OK
Chars per sentence: 120.380952381 100.406767564 120% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.5238095238 20.6045352989 114% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.90476190476 5.45110844103 72% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.310372972625 0.236089414692 131% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.133720522244 0.076458572812 175% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0888409065049 0.0737576698707 120% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.226951344027 0.150856017488 150% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0449769652561 0.0645574589148 70% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.4 11.7677419355 122% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 58.1214874552 97% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.71 10.9000537634 117% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.56 8.01818996416 94% => OK
difficult_words: 87.0 86.8835125448 100% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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