TPO-16 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The best way to travel is in a group led by a tour guide. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

Tours are very important because one can gain knowledge by visiting new places. There are different views on going on a tour. In my view, I believe that going in a group with a tour guide is better because one can learn new things from the tour guides and can have a lot of fun with other members in the group.

First, the main advantage of going on a tour with the tour guide is every person can learn new things about the place and cannot miss any information related to that particular tour. For instance, one year ago, When I went to Portland in the state of Oregon along with my husband, we did not take the tour guide, so that we missed some places to visit. Moreover, we did not see the important places near the Multnomah falls because we do not know much about that place, as we are basically from Boston. After coming from that place, my friends asked me about that place, where I was unable to explain to them because I have not visited that place. As a result, I felt very sad and disappointed.

Second, another benefit of going in a group is you can have a lot of fun. One can have fun like singing, dancing and can even play on a bus. So that they can share information, and can feel very happy. For instance, When I visited Niagara waterfalls, we took a tour bus, where there are fifty members in a bus. The tour guide explained everything about the important places near Niagara falls while going, and while coming from that place he conducted a small quiz in a bus about the history and origin of that place and also why that place became so famous? . I won a gift and everyone won at least one gift in that quiz program. This quiz is very fun and I still remembered a lot of things because he explained in a clear way. Therefore, going in a group is good to have a lot of enjoyment.

In conclusion, I strongly believe that one can learn more and cannot miss the important places if we go with the tour guide and can have a lot of joy.

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Average: 6 (1 vote)
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, if, moreover, second, so, still, therefore, while, at least, for instance, in conclusion, as a result, in my view

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.0286738351 154% => OK
Pronoun: 39.0 43.0788530466 91% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 52.1666666667 96% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1587.0 1977.66487455 80% => OK
No of words: 374.0 407.700716846 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.24331550802 4.8611393121 87% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.3976220399 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.25211012164 2.67179642975 84% => OK
Unique words: 165.0 212.727598566 78% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.441176470588 0.524837075471 84% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 508.5 618.680645161 82% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 57.6158979406 48.9658058833 118% => OK
Chars per sentence: 93.3529411765 100.406767564 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.0 20.6045352989 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.41176470588 5.45110844103 136% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0840900052453 0.236089414692 36% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0340047524348 0.076458572812 44% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0318553958101 0.0737576698707 43% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0635019007503 0.150856017488 42% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0239311576244 0.0645574589148 37% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.5 11.7677419355 81% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 66.07 58.1214874552 114% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 7.31 10.9000537634 67% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.59 8.01818996416 82% => OK
difficult_words: 44.0 86.8835125448 51% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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