TPO-17 - Independent Writing Task
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Most advertisements make products seem much better then they really are.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Since the dawn of marketing, there has been an increasing in the use of advertising to introduce and show the products to customers. With this in minde, a controversy exists whether the advertisements bring about products appear better than their reality or not. Some people believe that advertisements do nothing but providing some real information about product for costumers, while others hold this view that most advertisements provide an unreality information abour produsts and casue products seem better that they really are. I, personnaly, agree that the advertisemnets result in an incorrect information about product and casue them seem better that reality and provide some reason to support my point of view, Two of which will be illustrated in the following paragraghs.
The first reason why I agrree that advertisement result in product seem better than reality is that the one on of the most important feature of advertising is marketing, attracting more costomers, therefore, this principal uses wide variety of methods to make produstc seem luxurious to customers. The more luxurious the product, the more increasing in thier sell. Such an example, last year my family and I were going to buy a new television for our home. Consequently, we watched a lot of advertisment and also read some useful cataloge in order to achieve some information about a proper television in terms of proce, quality to name but a few. Finally, all my family reached an agreement to buy a television which was seemed appropriate for us. after buying this televesion, we found that all the advertisment that we had watched were nothing but exagerating. They exagerated the products particularly this television. As a result, if the company had not advertised this television in that way, we would not have bought the television.
The second reason that should be mentioned in suppoting my view that advertisement exagerated products is that today's world is a competetive world in all fields and marketying is not an exceptions. Companies use advertise in an exagerated way to win this competition and advocate more bazzar to themselves. The more you be succefull in copmtetition, the better would be your futuer. I am now working on the strategies using by companiy to overcome any obstacles in terms of their rival company they use advertisement to reach their goal. One renowned company in my country which has a lot of income and sells a lot of its product and win this tough competiosn using this way of advertising, exagereting the products.
All in all, by taknig all the aforementioned reasons and examples into account, it is concluded that most advertisements make products seem much better because not only does company want to attract more customer, but they are much more eager to win the competition from other company.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 109, Rule ID: ON_OF_THE[1]
Message: Did you mean 'one'?
Suggestion: one
...eem better than reality is that the one on of the most important feature of advert...
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Line 5, column 184, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'an exception' or simply 'exceptions'?
Suggestion: an exception; exceptions
...rld in all fields and marketying is not an exceptions. Companies use advertise in an exagerat...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, finally, first, if, really, second, so, therefore, while, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.0286738351 154% => OK
Pronoun: 50.0 43.0788530466 116% => OK
Preposition: 57.0 52.1666666667 109% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.0752688172 161% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2373.0 1977.66487455 120% => OK
No of words: 463.0 407.700716846 114% => OK
Chars per words: 5.1252699784 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.63868890866 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.03807010955 2.67179642975 114% => OK
Unique words: 230.0 212.727598566 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.496760259179 0.524837075471 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 754.2 618.680645161 122% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 7.0 3.08781362007 227% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 20.1344086022 124% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 74.3197961432 48.9658058833 152% => OK
Chars per sentence: 131.833333333 100.406767564 131% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.7222222222 20.6045352989 125% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.22222222222 5.45110844103 96% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.226782647832 0.236089414692 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0722442304926 0.076458572812 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0563112743426 0.0737576698707 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.150859043574 0.150856017488 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.048722255835 0.0645574589148 75% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.6 11.7677419355 133% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 58.1214874552 79% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 10.1575268817 128% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.77 10.9000537634 117% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.12 8.01818996416 101% => OK
difficult_words: 95.0 86.8835125448 109% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.5 10.002688172 155% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.0537634409 119% => OK
text_standard: 16.0 10.247311828 156% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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