TPO-47 - Independent Writing Task
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
It is important to know about events happening around the world, even if it is unlikely that they will affect your daily life.
In today's world, all people have been trying to access the news and event are being happened all around the world. With this in mind, a heated controversy exists as to whether it is crucial to know about events happening around the world even if it is unlikely that they will affect your daily life. Some people believe that it is effective to focus just on the event which is related to themselves, while others do not agree with them. I, personally, think that it is beneficial to be informed about all news and event which are happening around the world for some reasons, two of which are having knowledge always is an advantage and individuals can evaluate their life, will be substantiated in the following paragraphs.
The first reason which comes to my mind in order to support my idea why knowing about events happening around the word is important is that if an individual has any knowledge, it will help you in some situation. Being informed about news and event provide an opportunity for people to make a right decision even though events have not had any effect on their own lives. It is my personal experience that illustrates this fact clearly. Since I was at university, some events including political and economic issues have been occurring in some European countries. At that moment those events had not any effect on my daily life, but I could learn quite a few things about this event which helped me 2 years later. When I was about to select one university for my higher education, I decided to choose the countries in which those sort of event has not happened. Therefore, this decision paves the way for me to reach my goal in terms of being in the calm and stable country.
The other equally reason to support my claim that knowing about events is important even if they do not affect people's lives is that by knowing about the news, people are capable of evaluating their lives and compare their own lives with foreign' people. The more individuals know about news and events, the more they try to be better in terms of living level. The research recent which is done by a renowned university in Iran has been revealed that the people who are more aware of events and news happening around the world are more satisfied with their life, and also they try to receive their goals in life because they think that there are not far-fetched goal in this hectic life. Therefore, the most profound impact of knowing about news is that people can be familiarized with other people's goal and know about their life
All in all, by taking all the aforementioned reasons and examples, one can conclude that it is undeniable to know about events happening around the world because not only have people know about this event help them but also they can evaluate their life and be a successful person who reaches their goals.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 163, Rule ID: WHETHER[6]
Message: Can you shorten this phrase to just 'whether', or rephrase the sentence to avoid "as to"?
Suggestion: whether
...is in mind, a heated controversy exists as to whether it is crucial to know about events happ...
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Line 3, column 823, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this sort' or 'those nulls'?
Suggestion: this sort; those nulls
...ecided to choose the countries in which those sort of event has not happened. Therefore, t...
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Line 5, column 361, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
... to be better in terms of living level. The research recent which is done by a reno...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, so, therefore, while, as to, sort of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 34.0 15.1003584229 225% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 22.0 11.0286738351 199% => OK
Pronoun: 60.0 43.0788530466 139% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 70.0 52.1666666667 134% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2342.0 1977.66487455 118% => OK
No of words: 502.0 407.700716846 123% => OK
Chars per words: 4.66533864542 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.7334296765 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.3858222364 2.67179642975 89% => OK
Unique words: 215.0 212.727598566 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.42828685259 0.524837075471 82% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 742.5 618.680645161 120% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Article: 7.0 3.08781362007 227% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 33.0 20.1344086022 164% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 98.755590559 48.9658058833 202% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 156.133333333 100.406767564 156% => OK
Words per sentence: 33.4666666667 20.6045352989 162% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.86666666667 5.45110844103 71% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.321808500118 0.236089414692 136% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.125099352309 0.076458572812 164% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.10867816421 0.0737576698707 147% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.221731345844 0.150856017488 147% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0752604929956 0.0645574589148 117% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.3 11.7677419355 147% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.44 58.1214874552 80% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.0 10.1575268817 148% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.4 10.9000537634 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.07 8.01818996416 101% => OK
difficult_words: 89.0 86.8835125448 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.002688172 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 15.2 10.0537634409 151% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.247311828 146% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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