TPO 18- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Students are more influenced by their teachers than by their friends.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
The influence of people on each other is apparent in everyday life. Students at schools are no exception from this rule. They interact with their peers on a day-to-day basis. Moreover, their teachers could impact their beliefs and convictions about various issues. In my opinion, I disagree with the idea that mentors are more influential on learners than their friends. I feel this way for many reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.
To begin with, the generational gap limits the effect of teachers' interests and views on their students. Students are much younger than their tutors and this age discrepancy is a big barrier. For instance, young generations develop their own language, idioms and terms which older generations sometimes do not even understand. In addition, hobbies are different from one era to the other. Video games about war replaced hunting.
Secondly, society values change with time due to rigorous studies that have been conducted in many fields. What we believed to be the right thing in the past is somehow not exactly the way to go today. For example, most communities were convinced not long ago that mild physical or psychological punishment for students is a valuable method in education. Teachers in developing countries implemented a number of hits on the students' hands as a form of discipline for any mistakes made. In contrast, in developed nations non-corporal techniques were executed, such as requiring children to keep writing for a long time until exhaustion. Nowadays, all these ideas about punishment were proven to be ineffective. Although school staff including teachers were okay with these ways of tutoring, students did not have the same point of view and they were as a whole of different opinion than their teachers.
To conclude, I oppose the statement that teachers have a larger influence on their students than friends. This is mainly due to the fact that students belong to another generation than their teachers and they have their own hobbies, language and interests.
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...ir own hobbies, language and interests.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, moreover, second, secondly, so, for example, for instance, i feel, in addition, in contrast, such as, in my opinion, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 9.8082437276 20% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 31.0 43.0788530466 72% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 52.1666666667 90% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1726.0 1977.66487455 87% => OK
No of words: 333.0 407.700716846 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.18318318318 4.8611393121 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.27180144563 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73734883861 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 198.0 212.727598566 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.594594594595 0.524837075471 113% => OK
syllable_count: 521.1 618.680645161 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 39.0114085877 48.9658058833 80% => OK
Chars per sentence: 86.3 100.406767564 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.65 20.6045352989 81% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.7 5.45110844103 123% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.287819296406 0.236089414692 122% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0857567181811 0.076458572812 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.08921366383 0.0737576698707 121% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.201022945723 0.150856017488 133% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0838077313793 0.0645574589148 130% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.3 11.7677419355 96% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.24 58.1214874552 95% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.47 10.9000537634 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.03 8.01818996416 113% => OK
difficult_words: 97.0 86.8835125448 112% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 5.5 10.002688172 55% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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