TPO-18 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Students are more influenced by their teachers than by their friends. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

Throughout history, in all civilized societies, the student's issues have engender copious controversies among authorities. An important question which often raised regarding this concept is that whether teachers have more influence on students or their friend do. Some people are inclined toward the opinion the teacher have more influence on students, while others believe that students are impressed by their friends more that their teachers. I, despite the general consensus, contend that both student’s teacher and friends have important influence on student. In what follows, I will aptly substantiate my viewpoint.

The first exquisite point to be mentioned is that teacher not only seen by student as a respected person but also some students consider them as a model. In fact, student especially in early age want to imitate the teacher's behavior, so this imitative behavior in the long run will perceive as a proper behavior for student, and it is likely for students to continue acting in this way. The modern world is abundant examples of children who consider all their teachers behavior as appropriate manner. To demonstrate most of the scientists all over the world contend that the majority of children consider all the teacher's behavior as an example of proper behavior even if these behaviors are inappropriate. So, they established an experimental program to estimate the effect of teacher's manner in the classroom on students. The results are surprising: over 70 percent of students imitate the teacher's behavior even those behavior which are not proper.

Nonetheless, no one could deny the influence of friends on students. In fact, the students are really receptive to their friends and it is not socking that friends have important influence on students. In other word, note only do students spend most of their time with friends, but also student are really impressed by their friends due to same age range. The noteworthy refreshingly intelligible statistics revealed by recent social research conducted in our country show that the majority of students want to speak with their friend and get their advice especially when they get in trouble.

Taking all afore mentioned arguments into account leads us to conclusion that both friends and teachers have really important influence on students in view of the fact that they see their teachers as model, and spend most of their time with their friends.

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Average: 6.6 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 74, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Use past participle here: 'engendered'.
Suggestion: engendered
...zed societies, the students issues have engender copious controversies among authorities...
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Line 1, column 461, Rule ID: GENERAL_XX[1]
Message: Use simply 'consensus'.
Suggestion: consensus
...ore that their teachers. I, despite the general consensus, contend that both student's teach...
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Line 3, column 216, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'teachers'' or 'teacher's'?
Suggestion: teachers'; teacher's
...cially in early age want to imitate the teachers behavior, so this imitative behavior in...
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Line 3, column 614, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'teachers'' or 'teacher's'?
Suggestion: teachers'; teacher's
...e majority of children consider all the teachers behavior as an example of proper behavi...
^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 893, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'teachers'' or 'teacher's'?
Suggestion: teachers'; teacher's
...over 70 percent of students imitate the teachers behavior even those behavior which are ...
^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 916, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this behavior' or 'those behaviors'?
Suggestion: this behavior; those behaviors
...ents imitate the teachers behavior even those behavior which are not proper. Nonetheless, n...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, nonetheless, really, regarding, so, while, in fact

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 9.8082437276 31% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 37.0 43.0788530466 86% => OK
Preposition: 54.0 52.1666666667 104% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2053.0 1977.66487455 104% => OK
No of words: 388.0 407.700716846 95% => OK
Chars per words: 5.2912371134 4.8611393121 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.43821085614 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75537884962 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 192.0 212.727598566 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.494845360825 0.524837075471 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 614.7 618.680645161 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 9.59856630824 21% => OK
Article: 7.0 3.08781362007 227% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 55.695285651 48.9658058833 114% => OK
Chars per sentence: 128.3125 100.406767564 128% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.25 20.6045352989 118% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.5 5.45110844103 83% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.251023883853 0.236089414692 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0982743217593 0.076458572812 129% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0699140440457 0.0737576698707 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.182368635882 0.150856017488 121% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0464469768764 0.0645574589148 72% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.6 11.7677419355 133% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 58.1214874552 81% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 10.1575268817 125% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.7 10.9000537634 126% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.41 8.01818996416 105% => OK
difficult_words: 88.0 86.8835125448 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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