Education plays an important part of our lives because it helps us to learn a lot of new things and prepares us for the future career. Some people argue that teachers affect students more than friends do. Others disagree because they think the opposite. From my point of view, I contend that students are more influenced by their professors. I will explain my position in more details in the following essay.
To begin with, when a student receives excellent marks he or she are more motivated to continue their education. It is not a secret that everyone enjoys the process of studying if it is worthwhile. In contrast, I do not think that a fellow can motivate an individual to study the way teacher does. My personal experience is a compelling example of that. Two years when I studying in the ninth grade, I hated math because I could not understand it. I was getting bad marks and my professor decided to talk with me. She told me that I attend her additional group courses in order to improve my grades. I agreed to do so although, in the beginning, I did not believe that I can make any progress. However, I was wrong because in just a month I understood every complicated material and I was really happy that my teacher helped me. I believe I would have developed that much by communicating with my peers. As you can see, teachers are motivating the student to improve their skills.
Secondly, when people see that the professor is giving an advice it is more likely that they would use it. This helps a student to eliminate his mistakes. To illustrate my point I want to give my personal example. A year ago, during my English courses, I needed to prepare a presentation and talk about it in front of the audience. I was really excited but I did not know if my project is good enough. Therefore, I came to my professor and asked an advice. She told me that a presentation should consist of photos and no sentences. And that helped me to prepare carefully and, hence, I was feeling more confident. This taught me that teachers influence by giving a helping hand.
To sum up, even though some may oppose my opinion I firmly believe that teachers affect students more. This is because they help us to improve our skills.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, hence, however, if, may, really, second, secondly, so, therefore, while, in contrast, to begin with, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 18.0 11.0286738351 163% => OK
Pronoun: 85.0 43.0788530466 197% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 41.0 52.1666666667 79% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1832.0 1977.66487455 93% => OK
No of words: 402.0 407.700716846 99% => OK
Chars per words: 4.55721393035 4.8611393121 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.47771567384 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.63070257248 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 212.0 212.727598566 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.52736318408 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 584.1 618.680645161 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 20.0 9.59856630824 208% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 27.0 20.6003584229 131% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 20.1344086022 70% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 24.2443550484 48.9658058833 50% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 67.8518518519 100.406767564 68% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.8888888889 20.6045352989 72% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.25925925926 5.45110844103 78% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 18.0 11.8709677419 152% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.168186691299 0.236089414692 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0489214951101 0.076458572812 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0577434376145 0.0737576698707 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.108978545759 0.150856017488 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0541739873234 0.0645574589148 84% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 7.5 11.7677419355 64% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 65.73 58.1214874552 113% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 10.1575268817 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.58 10.9000537634 79% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.39 8.01818996416 92% => OK
difficult_words: 78.0 86.8835125448 90% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.6 10.0537634409 76% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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