TPO-18: students are more influenced by their teachers than by their friends
Each person could have influence on life of every human-being. Teachers, parents and even relations, all of these individuals can impact on people effectively. This brings us an arguable question whether teachers or friends have an impact on students. As far as I'm concerned, I think that students' friends have instrumental effects than school teachers.
The first reason why I contend that friends has more influence on students is that students spend most of their time with their friends. Students from the early morning until the afternoon are with friends at school. They speak with their friend in a group at classes in order to do a group projects. Adults during education in school exchange ideas with each other at the aftermentioned chances, which in turn, lead on influencing on one another. Additionally, students not only spend their school times with their friends but also students expend their leisure time on being with them. In fact, after school, adults gather together with their friend for the sake of watching a movie or going to live concert to listen to a live music. Therefore, friends can have either positive effects or adverse influences, which depends on the personality of a student' friends, because if friends are well-mannered person, they will affect positively and vice versa.
Secondly, students’ friend are more familiar what a student like or what they hate. In fact, when a person, consider a young one, goes to restaurant with his friend, he knows what types of meal his friend likes. His friend is familiar with that if he prepares him a food such as snake when he is a guest in his home he will like it and he will have a good feeling about his friend. Or if his friend cooks him a kabab, he will get angry. So, his friend would influence on an adult by cooking his favorite food. Moreover, friends are acquaintance regarding to what things students love. For instance, one of my friend knows that I have a special interest for technological devices such as gadgets, mobile phones and so forth. Thus, my friend could definitely has a pivotal effect on me by purchasing for me gadgets as a gift. So, as you can see, the friends will have more effects on adults because they can provide us things such as foods and staffs that we like.
In conclusion, according to above-mentioned reasons, I would say that friends are more influential on students than teachers are. The reasons for this standpoint are firstly, juveniles spend most of their time with friends and secondly, they know juveniles preferences well. How could a teacher impact on juveniles, but nevertheless they only are aware of student' education situation?
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, if, moreover, nevertheless, regarding, second, secondly, so, therefore, thus, well, for instance, i think, in conclusion, in fact, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 54.0 43.0788530466 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 63.0 52.1666666667 121% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2219.0 1977.66487455 112% => OK
No of words: 452.0 407.700716846 111% => OK
Chars per words: 4.9092920354 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.61088837703 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.70270597485 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 228.0 212.727598566 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.504424778761 0.524837075471 96% => OK
syllable_count: 652.5 618.680645161 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.0868076233 48.9658058833 78% => OK
Chars per sentence: 96.4782608696 100.406767564 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.652173913 20.6045352989 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.17391304348 5.45110844103 132% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 20.0 11.8709677419 168% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.35219881149 0.236089414692 149% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.112893267147 0.076458572812 148% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0944262216558 0.0737576698707 128% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.220873527135 0.150856017488 146% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.086703037224 0.0645574589148 134% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.5 11.7677419355 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 69.11 58.1214874552 119% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.3 10.1575268817 82% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.2 10.9000537634 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.79 8.01818996416 97% => OK
difficult_words: 92.0 86.8835125448 106% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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