In my opinion, I agree that successful people always try new things and take risks. This is because they wanted to gain the knowledge through an experience rather than the fear.
First, successful people always wanted to reach their goals through an experience. For instance, Einstein invented the bulb by failing thousand times. He did experiments and gained the knowledge through an experience. He gained success only because he learned each and every point behind his failure and did not repeat the mistakes of his first experiment. As a result, every individual today is feeling happy, because of his invention. Moreover, these people become more confident and strong in their lives. And also gains the capacity to achieve anything in their life.
Second, successful people are more adventurous to take risks in their life. The reason is they wanted to do things differently and wanted to be unique from others. They enjoy doing things differently. For instance, Kalpana chawla American space Astronaut, she is the first woman of India who visited the space and got success and now the whole world remembers her. Furthermore, these people will also be as an inspiration or role models to the young generation. They do not fear instead they keep trying to achieve success.
In conclusion, I strongly believe that people gained success only because of taking risks to achieve things in a different way and by an experience in their lives.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Use simply: 'a thousand'.
Suggestion: a thousand
..., Einstein invented the bulb by failing thousand times. He did experiments and gained th...
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Message: The verb 'did' requires the base form of the verb: 'experiment'
Suggestion: experiment
... bulb by failing thousand times. He did experiments and gained the knowledge through an exp...
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Message: Consider replacing "in a different way" with adverb for "different"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...cause of taking risks to achieve things in a different way and by an experience in their lives.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, furthermore, if, moreover, second, so, for instance, in conclusion, as a result, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 15.1003584229 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 9.8082437276 10% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 11.0286738351 27% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 26.0 43.0788530466 60% => OK
Preposition: 27.0 52.1666666667 52% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1212.0 1977.66487455 61% => OK
No of words: 238.0 407.700716846 58% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.09243697479 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.92775363542 4.48103885553 88% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.58598341414 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 133.0 212.727598566 63% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.558823529412 0.524837075471 106% => OK
syllable_count: 369.9 618.680645161 60% => syllable counts are too short.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 14.0 20.1344086022 70% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 34.8763440601 48.9658058833 71% => OK
Chars per sentence: 75.75 100.406767564 75% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.875 20.6045352989 72% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.6875 5.45110844103 123% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.210680047899 0.236089414692 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.079256957466 0.076458572812 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0801166619184 0.0737576698707 109% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.149016834495 0.150856017488 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0754018155534 0.0645574589148 117% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.0 11.7677419355 85% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 57.27 58.1214874552 99% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.8 10.1575268817 87% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.65 10.9000537634 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.45 8.01818996416 93% => OK
difficult_words: 47.0 86.8835125448 54% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.6 10.0537634409 76% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Minimum 250 words wanted.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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