Yes, I agree with the statement that successful people always try out different things and take risks to find out new rather than doing things that they already know how to do well. Good examples for this are our scientists and artists. I would give some real instances to prove that a successful person may it be in any field, chose to do things in newer and different way.
I always believe that more the risk you take doing a thing, more you learn. For instance, in our corporate, apart from doing the same job, we were given some hardware devices to handle. There were five people including me and we all took the risk of handling the device with grate care. That's how we learned how to use that new device. We got the knowledge. Similarly, our scientists on the same line, try to do the things in different way, taking new risks each time. Only by trying out new things, one can able to find out the successful way to reach a goal. I believe with the principle, "Do things in a variety way to find the best way to reach the goal". On the other hand, assume if our scientists had used the same way to do everything, then, we never would have come so far in any field.
On the similar note, the artists, may it be dancers, actors, singers, try out different way to impress the audience. For example, an actor who has played a character of a James Bond and also a character of a layman would get more appreciation than an actor who keeps playing one single role in almost all films. Here, the actor who has played both the roles, has taken risk to invigorate. Hence, he is successful. On the other hand, the actor who played a single role would be less illustrious.
In both the instances, we can observe that gaining knowledge is the ultimate result of doing things in different way or taking risks in doing the things. Hence, more knowledge leads to more success. Therefore I truly admit that success comes only when any aspect is done in different way taking risk.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 97, Rule ID: ADMIT_ENJOY_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the gerund form: 'risks finding'.
Suggestion: risks finding
...lways try out different things and take risks to find out new rather than doing things that t...
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Line 3, column 288, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: That's
...of handling the device with grate care. Thats how we learned how to use that new devi...
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Line 7, column 200, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Therefore,
..., more knowledge leads to more success. Therefore I truly admit that success comes only w...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, hence, if, may, similarly, so, then, therefore, well, apart from, for example, for instance, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 13.8261648746 43% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 43.0788530466 70% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 52.1666666667 84% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1625.0 1977.66487455 82% => OK
No of words: 364.0 407.700716846 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.46428571429 4.8611393121 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.36792674256 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.35530904101 2.67179642975 88% => OK
Unique words: 182.0 212.727598566 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.5 0.524837075471 95% => OK
syllable_count: 497.7 618.680645161 80% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.2950051301 48.9658058833 95% => OK
Chars per sentence: 81.25 100.406767564 81% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.2 20.6045352989 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.8 5.45110844103 106% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.31169232032 0.236089414692 132% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0946665726383 0.076458572812 124% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.106855212832 0.0737576698707 145% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.208011537016 0.150856017488 138% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.129314129145 0.0645574589148 200% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.7 11.7677419355 74% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 70.13 58.1214874552 121% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.9 10.1575268817 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.59 10.9000537634 79% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.87 8.01818996416 86% => OK
difficult_words: 54.0 86.8835125448 62% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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