A company has announced that it wishes to build a large factory near your
community. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of this new influence
on your community. Do you support or oppose the factory? Explain your
position.
When a company announces such a news, that it is wishing to build a large factory near my community, I would definitely support. I support this announcement with two reasons. One reason is it makes way for modernization. The second reason is it will eliminate unemployment in the nearby areas. I believe that there are both pros and cons, but in this fast growing world, I feel raising up of a factory nearby our community would help everyone to get modernized. I believe that with this modernization, the life becomes more easier. I will be giving specific examples to support the reasons stated above for raising up of a factory near our community.
The first reason that I quoted is that it paves way for modernization. According to me, modernization is defined as making things happen faster using specialized equipment and tools. For example consider early days women who use to cook using fire wood. The food use to get prepared very late. But, nowadays, with the help of gas stoves and electric stoves, the preparation of food has become much easier and faster. These equipment are manufactured in factories. It can be any product manufacturing factory. If such a factory raises nearby our community, our people will get introduced with such a product and will try to make the life easier by using that product since it is quiet easily available.
The next reason why I would support the raising up of a factory is, it will eliminate unemployment. Just a decade ago, many youngsters were suffering from unemployment. Today, due to the advent of software industries, the unemployment has came down. But still in some areas, the unemployment prevails. With the development of such a factory nearby our community, it will help people to provide employment and will make way for them to lead a happy life. I believe, a factory initially can give employments to minimum of one hundred people or more. As the company gains its fame, its people size will increase eventually and thus bring the unemployment count down.
Thus, with the above two reasons and explanations, I would conclude saying that I would support the raising up of the factory. Because, it helps the people to live a modern, easier and faster life. It helps eliminating unemployment which is still prevailing in some areas. By the elimination of unemployment, it will help people to find their own bread and butter.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 47, Rule ID: PROGRESSIVE_VERBS[1]
Message: This verb is normally not used in the progressive form. Try a simple form instead.
... company announces such a news, that it is wishing to build a large factory near my commun...
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Line 1, column 520, Rule ID: MOST_COMPARATIVE[2]
Message: Use only 'easier' (without 'more') when you use the comparative.
Suggestion: easier
...th this modernization, the life becomes more easier. I will be giving specific examples to ...
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Line 1, column 533, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...nization, the life becomes more easier. I will be giving specific examples to sup...
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Line 3, column 72, Rule ID: ACCORDING_TO_ME[1]
Message: This phrase can sound awkward in English. Consider using 'in my opinion' or 'I think'.
Suggestion: In my opinion; I think
...is that it paves way for modernization. According to me, modernization is defined as making thi...
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Line 3, column 226, Rule ID: USE_TO_VERB[1]
Message: Did you mean 'used'?
Suggestion: used
...r example consider early days women who use to cook using fire wood. The food use t...
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Line 3, column 264, Rule ID: USE_TO_VERB[1]
Message: Did you mean 'used'?
Suggestion: used
...o use to cook using fire wood. The food use to get prepared very late. But, nowaday...
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Line 3, column 418, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this equipment' or 'These equipments'?
Suggestion: This equipment; These equipments
...food has become much easier and faster. These equipment are manufactured in factories. It can b...
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Line 5, column 240, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Use past participle here: 'come'.
Suggestion: come
...ftware industries, the unemployment has came down. But still in some areas, the unem...
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Line 7, column 208, Rule ID: ADVISE_VBG[5]
Message: The verb 'help' is used with infinitive: 'to eliminate' or 'eliminate'.
Suggestion: to eliminate; eliminate
...odern, easier and faster life. It helps eliminating unemployment which is still prevailing ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, second, so, still, thus, for example, i feel, in fact
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 9.8082437276 163% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 44.0 43.0788530466 102% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 52.1666666667 92% => OK
Nominalization: 19.0 8.0752688172 235% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1988.0 1977.66487455 101% => OK
No of words: 406.0 407.700716846 100% => OK
Chars per words: 4.89655172414 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.48881294772 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.86167892003 2.67179642975 107% => OK
Unique words: 201.0 212.727598566 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.495073891626 0.524837075471 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 636.3 618.680645161 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 18.0 9.59856630824 188% => OK
Article: 9.0 3.08781362007 291% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 20.6003584229 126% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.1344086022 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 39.6029106575 48.9658058833 81% => OK
Chars per sentence: 76.4615384615 100.406767564 76% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.6153846154 20.6045352989 76% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.65384615385 5.45110844103 49% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.5376344086 163% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.85842293907 207% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.145718085879 0.236089414692 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0422848567947 0.076458572812 55% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.076808001844 0.0737576698707 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0960888212995 0.150856017488 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0937281181172 0.0645574589148 145% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.5 11.7677419355 81% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 56.25 58.1214874552 97% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.84 10.9000537634 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.53 8.01818996416 94% => OK
difficult_words: 81.0 86.8835125448 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.0537634409 80% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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