The following appeared as part of an article in a business magazine.
"A recent study rating 300 male and female Mentian advertising executives according to the average number of hours they sleep per night showed an association between the amount of sleep the executives need and the success of their firms. Of the advertising firms studied, those whose executives reported needing no more than 6 hours of sleep per night had higher profit margins and faster growth. These results suggest that if a business wants to prosper, it should hire only people who need less than 6 hours of sleep per night."
Write a response in which you examine the stated and/or unstated assumptions of the argument. Be sure to explain how the argument depends on these assumptions and what the implications are for the argument if the assumptions prove unwarranted.
The author's claim that the number of sleeping hours is inversely proportional lacks proper proofs and evidences. There are many loop holes which definitely has to be addressed before stating the conclusion. No relation can be drawn between the statements to accept the conclusion. Hence this argument is lacking proper proof and is inherently flawed.
First of all, the author is claiming that the sleeping hours is inversely proportional to the profit made by the firms. This statement can be repudiated as there is no relation between the sleeping hours and the success of a firm. Moreover the firm is not run by a single executive. For a firm to be successful, every person in that firm holds the responsibility. Hence it cannot be concluded that if an executive sleeps for less hours is able to make the firm see success.
Secondly, the sleep hours varies from one person to another person. It is also likely that people with good sleep, may be more than six hours, are likely to work effectively in their diurnal time. If there is less sleep, it is also likely that the efficiency of an executive may debilitate. Hence, the number of sleeping hours of a person cannot be fixed as six or less than six for the successful firm. Due to this loop hole, it cannot be concluded that the people who are having six or less than six hours of sleep is able to find success.
Thirdly, the author is stating a strategy, that the business firm has to intake the people who are having sleep hours less than six hours. This makes no sense. The company's strategy should be such that they have to intake the people who are having good business acumen and mindful in all perspectives. Instead, the the author is claiming that the number of sleeping hours of an interviewee has to be considered. This seems facile. This cannot be counted for the firm's prosperity.
Thus, in total, the authors claims and arguments lacks proper evidence to accept the position of statements. Still more research and study has to be made to state the conclusions.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
argument 1 -- OK
argument 2 -- not exactly
argument 3 -- not exactly.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 22 15
No. of Words: 356 350
No. of Characters: 1639 1500
No. of Different Words: 150 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.344 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.604 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.459 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 110 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 67 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 52 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 32 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 16.182 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 6.603 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.5 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.303 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.514 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.082 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 282, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Hence,
...he statements to accept the conclusion. Hence this argument is lacking proper proof a...
^^^^^
Line 3, column 232, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Moreover,
...eeping hours and the success of a firm. Moreover the firm is not run by a single executi...
^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 365, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Hence,
... in that firm holds the responsibility. Hence it cannot be concluded that if an execu...
^^^^^
Line 3, column 426, Rule ID: LESS_DOLLARSMINUTESHOURS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'fewer hours'?
Suggestion: fewer hours
...ncluded that if an executive sleeps for less hours is able to make the firm see success. ...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 426, Rule ID: FEWER_LESS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'fewer'? The noun hours is countable.
Suggestion: fewer
...ncluded that if an executive sleeps for less hours is able to make the firm see succ...
^^^^
Line 7, column 312, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: the
...d mindful in all perspectives. Instead, the the author is claiming that the number of s...
^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 312, Rule ID: DT_DT[1]
Message: Maybe you need to remove one determiner so that only 'the' or 'the' is left.
Suggestion: the; the
...d mindful in all perspectives. Instead, the the author is claiming that the number of s...
^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 463, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'firms'' or 'firm's'?
Suggestion: firms'; firm's
... facile. This cannot be counted for the firms prosperity. Thus, in total, the auth...
^^^^^
Line 9, column 110, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Still,
...e to accept the position of statements. Still more research and study has to be made ...
^^^^^
Line 9, column 181, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...as to be made to state the conclusions.
^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, hence, if, may, moreover, second, secondly, so, still, third, thirdly, thus, as to, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 31.0 19.6327345309 158% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.9520958084 69% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 11.1786427146 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 13.6137724551 103% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 28.8173652695 76% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 55.5748502994 65% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 16.3942115768 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1689.0 2260.96107784 75% => OK
No of words: 356.0 441.139720559 81% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.74438202247 5.12650576532 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.34372677135 4.56307096286 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.56796732697 2.78398813304 92% => OK
Unique words: 154.0 204.123752495 75% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.432584269663 0.468620217663 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 517.5 705.55239521 73% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 4.96107784431 161% => OK
Article: 8.0 8.76447105788 91% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 19.7664670659 111% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 22.8473053892 70% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 34.9873944242 57.8364921388 60% => OK
Chars per sentence: 76.7727272727 119.503703932 64% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.1818181818 23.324526521 69% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.95454545455 5.70786347227 87% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 5.25449101796 190% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 8.20758483034 158% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 6.88822355289 44% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.67664670659 128% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.164952092704 0.218282227539 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.058938959133 0.0743258471296 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0598408391711 0.0701772020484 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0953781753037 0.128457276422 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0452000856831 0.0628817314937 72% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.0 14.3799401198 63% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 48.3550499002 132% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 12.197005988 69% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.92 12.5979740519 79% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.09 8.32208582834 85% => OK
difficult_words: 60.0 98.500998004 61% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 12.3882235529 57% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.4 11.1389221557 75% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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