Claim: Even though young people often receive the advice to “follow your dreams,” more emphasis should be placed on picking worthy goals.
Reason: Many people’s dreams are inherently selfish.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim AND the reason on which that claim is based.
Dream is an illusion. People dream everyday whether they are sleeping or they are awake. No doubt a person should have a dream, but as per the author's statement, most people will inherently have selfish dreams. They are driven by cynicism. Dreaming is human tendency. But one should have dream such that it should not have any bad effect on anyone. It should be for the development of the oneself, nation and ultimately the world. Hence I totally agree with the authors claim that even though the young people are said to dream, picking the right direction to achieve a dream should be emphasized, which is making them to choose bad way instead.
As said in the first paragraph, a young mind should have many dream. Dream should be as such that develops oneself and in turn the world. Young people are always open to all sorts of suggestions. Hence their minds are always malleable. With such a plastic nature of thinking, it is easy to make a child an epitome of achiever of follower of his dream or a felonious person. Young people in schools and colleges dream. It is also the responsibility of parents and teachers to make the kids to dream in a way which does not hamper anyone while achieving them. If a kid starts to dream about something, the same way of dreaming it tries to implement in all thoughts. Hence it is also a responsibility of elders to make them dream in proper way, by nurturing and rearing them in congenial and suitable environments.
Many people to achieve their dream, do bad things. For example in some hospitals, in order to achieve a goal, such as making a margin money per day, they charge surplus amount on patients. This is a selfish activity. A hospital's duty is to take a good care of the patients, instead many hospitals are only to make money and reach the expected revenue per day. This is a selfish and fraudulent activity. This may load the patients who are financially back. Not only in medical in many other fields this happens. Even in the field of education, politics, transportation and so on. Even though it look semblance, the hidden selfishness is not known.
Thus, in total, as author's claim that more stress should be laid on good dreams which helps to uplift a person and make him a good citizen in future because, unknowingly a person may inherit the felonious way of dreaming which may cause people suffer around him.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 36, Rule ID: EVERYDAY_EVERY_DAY[3]
Message: 'Everyday' is an adjective. Did you mean 'every day'?
Suggestion: every day
Dream is an illusion. People dream everyday whether they are sleeping or they are a...
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Line 1, column 144, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
...son should have a dream, but as per the authors statement, most people will inherently ...
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Line 1, column 289, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Use past participle here: 'dreamed', 'dreamt'.
Suggestion: dreamed; dreamt
... is human tendency. But one should have dream such that it should not have any bad ef...
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Line 1, column 386, Rule ID: DT_PRP[1]
Message: Possible typo. Did you mean 'the' or 'oneself'?
Suggestion: the; oneself
...ne. It should be for the development of the oneself, nation and ultimately the world. Hence...
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Line 1, column 432, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Hence,
...eself, nation and ultimately the world. Hence I totally agree with the authors claim ...
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Line 3, column 58, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun dream seems to be countable; consider using: 'many dreams'.
Suggestion: many dreams
...rst paragraph, a young mind should have many dream. Dream should be as such that develops ...
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Line 3, column 197, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Hence,
...lways open to all sorts of suggestions. Hence their minds are always malleable. With ...
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Line 3, column 665, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Hence,
... it tries to implement in all thoughts. Hence it is also a responsibility of elders t...
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Line 5, column 220, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'hospitals'' or 'hospital's'?
Suggestion: hospitals'; hospital's
...patients. This is a selfish activity. A hospitals duty is to take a good care of the pati...
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Line 5, column 596, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'looks'?
Suggestion: looks
...ransportation and so on. Even though it look semblance, the hidden selfishness is no...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, hence, if, look, may, so, thus, while, for example, no doubt, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 19.5258426966 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.4196629213 97% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 14.8657303371 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.3162921348 80% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 31.0 33.0505617978 94% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 58.6224719101 87% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 12.9106741573 54% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1959.0 2235.4752809 88% => OK
No of words: 421.0 442.535393258 95% => OK
Chars per words: 4.65320665083 5.05705443957 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.52971130743 4.55969084622 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.54494192957 2.79657885939 91% => OK
Unique words: 204.0 215.323595506 95% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.484560570071 0.4932671777 98% => OK
syllable_count: 599.4 704.065955056 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.59117977528 88% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 6.24550561798 128% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.99550561798 80% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.10617977528 129% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 27.0 20.2370786517 133% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 23.0359550562 65% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 57.8931421863 60.3974514979 96% => OK
Chars per sentence: 72.5555555556 118.986275619 61% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.5925925926 23.4991977007 66% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.22222222222 5.21951772744 62% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 7.80617977528 128% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 10.2758426966 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 5.13820224719 117% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.83258426966 166% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.250615085999 0.243740707755 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0696452107484 0.0831039109588 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0558372656701 0.0758088955206 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.15861626501 0.150359130593 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0491049117933 0.0667264976115 74% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.3 14.1392134831 59% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 73.17 48.8420337079 150% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.8 12.1743820225 56% => Flesch kincaid grade is low.
coleman_liau_index: 9.39 12.1639044944 77% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.34 8.38706741573 88% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 100.480337079 79% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 5.5 11.8971910112 46% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.0 11.2143820225 71% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.7820224719 68% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.