The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing and supporting your position, be sure to address the most compelling reasons and/or examples that could be used to challenge your position.
The author's claim insisting on cooperation rather competition in molding young people to become leader is quiet debatable. We all know that today's young people are our future citizens. They are the citizens who are our future leaders to rule the nations. For such citizens, it is necessary to make them learn the sense of cooperation rather than competition. Thus, I totally agree with the author's position of statement.
The young citizens, are precious and are to be reared with good sense of cooperation. This can be done through good education form good institutions. The students in their learning age should be made known the distinction of what is cooperation and competition. This helps them to cultivate the habit of cooperation. In many countries such as England, India, such education systems are followed, where cooperation sense of education are stressed and the students grow up with that sense of knowledge. The cooperation sense of education brings the sense of harmony and this harmony will draw everyone in harmony, which will in turn makes the nation live a immaculate utopia. Hence, making the students learn the sense of cooperation is good to their respective nations.
There is one more goodness to talk about the sense of cooperation. The cooperation sense also brings the egalitarian attitude. This attitude is one of the vital quality a leader has to have. Only with this attitude a good leader may it be in any field, say government or in industry, can take the system to reach its respective goal. The sense of cooperation brings the sense of impartiality. It also brings the quality of understanding. One more leader quality is to pay the attentions of his or her retinue, for their suggestions and plans. This quality makes a good leader. Thus, I believe the sense of cooperation brings several advantages to a person and also helps to develops ones persona.
Although, it is said that cooperation brings greater advantage, there should also be some percentage of competition. Though the competition sense brings the pugnacious attitude in everyone at its height, it urges oneself to reach the goal. For instance, among the students, if there is no competition to secure good scores in their exams, the purpose of keeping the examinations becomes questionable. Hence, there should be sense of competition but it should be a healthy competition.
Thus, in a nutshell, instilling the sense of cooperation should be stressed rather than sense of competition, to make them good citizen and in turn good of a mankind.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
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Message: The verb after "to" should be in the base form: 'develop'.
Suggestion: develop
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Message: Did you mean 'one's'?
Suggestion: one's
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, hence, if, may, so, still, thus, as to, for instance, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 19.5258426966 123% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.4196629213 81% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 14.8657303371 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.3162921348 53% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 33.0 33.0505617978 100% => OK
Preposition: 59.0 58.6224719101 101% => OK
Nominalization: 32.0 12.9106741573 248% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2135.0 2235.4752809 96% => OK
No of words: 420.0 442.535393258 95% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.08333333333 5.05705443957 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.52701905584 4.55969084622 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.90489753782 2.79657885939 104% => OK
Unique words: 182.0 215.323595506 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.433333333333 0.4932671777 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 675.0 704.065955056 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 6.24550561798 192% => OK
Article: 7.0 4.99550561798 140% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 20.2370786517 128% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 23.0359550562 69% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 41.540473598 60.3974514979 69% => OK
Chars per sentence: 82.1153846154 118.986275619 69% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.1538461538 23.4991977007 69% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.76923076923 5.21951772744 53% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 7.80617977528 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 10.2758426966 156% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.83258426966 166% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.147341102202 0.243740707755 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0465400116685 0.0831039109588 56% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0345345301738 0.0758088955206 46% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0931192641954 0.150359130593 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0154763060284 0.0667264976115 23% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.6 14.1392134831 75% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 55.24 48.8420337079 113% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 12.1743820225 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.89 12.1639044944 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.44 8.38706741573 89% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 100.480337079 80% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 11.8971910112 55% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.4 11.2143820225 75% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.7820224719 85% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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