Twenty years ago, Dr. Field, a noted anthropologist, visited the island of Tertia. Using an observation-centered approach to studying Tertian culture, he concluded from his observations that children in Tertia were reared by an entire village rather than by their own biological parents. Recently another anthropologist, Dr. Karp, visited the group of islands that includes Tertia and used the interview-centered method to study child-rearing practices. In the interviews that Dr. Karp conducted with children living in this group of islands, the children spent much more time talking about their biological parents than about other adults in the village. Dr. Karp decided that Dr. Field's conclusion about Tertian village culture must be invalid. Some anthropologists recommend that to obtain accurate information on Tertian child-rearing practices, future research on the subject should be conducted via the interview-centered method.
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the recommendation and the argument on which it is based are reasonable. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation.
The author's claim regarding the culture and practices that are held in the Tertia Island by different anthropologists seems facile. There are many loops holes that needs to be addressed, before concluding the statements. More number of proofs and evidences are needed to admit the conclusions.
Firstly, the author is stating that Dr. Karp is abandoning the observations made by Dr. Field with the reason that seems unjustified. Twenty years ago the culture and the practices that were adopted by the Tertia island might have now changed making the observations made by Dr. Feild obsolete. It may be likely that there was small population twenty years ago which made Dr. Feild perform observation-centered study. Without the population scale and the comparison between the culture and practices for twenty years, it is not possible to say whether Dr. Feild's observations are wrong.
Secondly, as per Dr. Karp's observation that all the children in that Island are talking more on their biological parents. It may also be likely that the child rearing practice is still continuing in the Island, which is making the children miss their true parents and this is why they are talking much more time on their biological parents than the other adults. Hence only by observing that the children are talking much more on their biological parents, it cannot be said that Dr. Feild's observations are invalid.
Thirdly, there is no proper evidences are provided which shows which activity of study is providing more accurate results. The activity performed always depends on the population scale, time, previous practices and so many other things which cannot be ignored. Hence concluding that the future studies has to incorporate interview-centerd method to study the child-rearing practices is futile.
Thus, in total, there are several loop hole the author need to address before drawing the conclusion. Still greater and deeper studies and comparisons has to be made to understand the child-rearing practices in Tertia Island before concluding the facts.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 15 15
No. of Words: 327 350
No. of Characters: 1696 1500
No. of Different Words: 162 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.252 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.187 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.807 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 124 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 88 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 56 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 43 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 21.8 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 6.988 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.733 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.351 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.644 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.104 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 364, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Hence,
...ological parents than the other adults. Hence only by observing that the children are...
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Line 7, column 262, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Hence,
...y other things which cannot be ignored. Hence concluding that the future studies has ...
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Line 9, column 40, Rule ID: THERE_RE_MANY[3]
Message: Possible agreement error. Did you mean 'holes'?
Suggestion: holes
... Thus, in total, there are several loop hole the author need to address before drawi...
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Line 9, column 103, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Still,
... address before drawing the conclusion. Still greater and deeper studies and comparis...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, hence, if, may, regarding, second, secondly, so, still, third, thirdly, thus, as to
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 27.0 19.6327345309 138% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 12.9520958084 46% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 11.1786427146 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 13.6137724551 125% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 28.8173652695 76% => OK
Preposition: 31.0 55.5748502994 56% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 5.0 16.3942115768 30% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1734.0 2260.96107784 77% => OK
No of words: 327.0 441.139720559 74% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.30275229358 5.12650576532 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.25242769721 4.56307096286 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.86064337074 2.78398813304 103% => OK
Unique words: 162.0 204.123752495 79% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.495412844037 0.468620217663 106% => OK
syllable_count: 523.8 705.55239521 74% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.96107784431 81% => OK
Article: 3.0 8.76447105788 34% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 19.7664670659 76% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 22.8473053892 92% => OK
Sentence length SD: 37.5795452636 57.8364921388 65% => OK
Chars per sentence: 115.6 119.503703932 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.8 23.324526521 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.0 5.70786347227 123% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.25449101796 76% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.20758483034 49% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 6.88822355289 73% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.67664670659 128% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.243209286419 0.218282227539 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0874484094725 0.0743258471296 118% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0667159946917 0.0701772020484 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.122814234557 0.128457276422 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0658672847865 0.0628817314937 105% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.4 14.3799401198 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 48.3550499002 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.197005988 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.46 12.5979740519 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.06 8.32208582834 97% => OK
difficult_words: 70.0 98.500998004 71% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 12.3882235529 69% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.1389221557 93% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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