If a goal is worthy, then any means taken to attain it are justifiable.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.
The author's claim that if a goal seems to be worthy, then it is justifiable to achieve by any means is quiet debatable. I believe that there are two views which can be connoted in this perspective. One is to achieve the goal by putting over-selves on the boat, sailing on the ocean which is having storms and tides, and the other one is to achieve the goal, no matter how deleterious it is to the people around us.
Firstly, when anyone wants to achieve any goal, one have to work very hard in a way that one should be ready to face any sorts of apparent dangers. For example, Mahatma Gandhi, in order to free India from British hegemony, held the way of non-violence way of protesting against the British. He was a good leader. He gathered so many men and women in this protest to achieve his goal. He suffered imprisonment for many long years, racism and so many other difficulties in the way to bring freedom to India. His hard work no matter how hard the path was, he achieved the goal and India got independence.
On the other hand, there are some people, who will try to achieve a goal no matter how hard it is to them and even if it is harmful to the people who are around them. For example, some politicians always hold the cheapest way to make money. They are always driven by selfishness and are rapacious. Just to get the good position in their field and make money, they are ready to use man power to threaten the people to and make them elect that person and thus achieve the goal. They might think that it is justifiable that is helping to achieve their goal. But at the same time it is causing harm to people surrounding them. Similarly, the smugglers and thieves also take the same path, that is to make money, the cause harm to the surrounding people.
Thus, in total, achieving the goal is a great thing, and the attainment of this goal of success becomes justifiable only if it is achieved by going in the right direction without causing any harm to anyone.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 394, Rule ID: NOUN_AROUND_IT[1]
Message: Consider using 'the surrounding people'?
Suggestion: the surrounding people
...oal, no matter how deleterious it is to the people around us. Firstly, when anyone wants to achi...
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Line 3, column 385, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...en in this protest to achieve his goal. He suffered imprisonment for many long yea...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, if, similarly, so, then, thus, for example, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 25.0 19.5258426966 128% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 12.4196629213 32% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 14.8657303371 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.3162921348 106% => OK
Pronoun: 34.0 33.0505617978 103% => OK
Preposition: 52.0 58.6224719101 89% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 12.9106741573 46% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1619.0 2235.4752809 72% => OK
No of words: 367.0 442.535393258 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.41144414169 5.05705443957 87% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37689890912 4.55969084622 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.40138142772 2.79657885939 86% => OK
Unique words: 175.0 215.323595506 81% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.476839237057 0.4932671777 97% => OK
syllable_count: 508.5 704.065955056 72% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.59117977528 88% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 6.24550561798 160% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.77640449438 169% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.2370786517 84% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 23.0359550562 91% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.3995839959 60.3974514979 88% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.2352941176 118.986275619 80% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.5882352941 23.4991977007 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.17647058824 5.21951772744 99% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 7.80617977528 26% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 10.2758426966 68% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 5.13820224719 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.101383563401 0.243740707755 42% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0347200965412 0.0831039109588 42% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0317444376974 0.0758088955206 42% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0717952332975 0.150359130593 48% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0346931012647 0.0667264976115 52% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.1 14.1392134831 71% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 67.08 48.8420337079 137% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 12.1743820225 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.3 12.1639044944 68% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.13 8.38706741573 85% => OK
difficult_words: 57.0 100.480337079 57% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 11.8971910112 113% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.2143820225 93% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.7820224719 85% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.