Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
For success in a future job, the ability to relate well to people is more important than studying hard in school.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Yes, I will definitely agree with the statement that for success in future job, we have to develop well relations with the people rather than studying hard in schools or colleges. That is to say in other words, we have to improvise our communication skills and develop good relations with the people at corporate. I would explain my opinions with some instances in next paragraphs
Developing good relations with the people in the corporate can be considered as one of the art. One should have a tact to deal and win among the people. For instance, my father is a CFO in a software company. When he joined the company, its size was just fifteen to twenty people. Whereas now its size is nearly 700. He worked very hard to bring-in contracts. He developed very good relations with the people whom he dealt and hence was able to bring the company to such a great level. When there is good communication one can definitely win over.
On the other had just by studying hard in school would not yield as much as it yields in the development of good relation. For instance, consider Bill Gates, who was a co-founder of a corporate, Microsoft. He was a school drop-out. Yet with his tact and relations with people, he was able to build such a great company. As I said, good relations comes with good communication. We can make people affirm positively with us with an appeal in communication. One more instance in this aspect to say is, when I joined my corporate, I was put to a team which was less interesting. I spoke with my manager and was able to make a change of team with in a span of two months. A good communication will persuade anyone.
These are the reasons why I believe that developing good relations with the people will lead us to the success rather than studying hard in schools.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
hence, if, so, well, whereas, for instance, in my opinion, in other words, that is to say
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 43.0788530466 74% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 52.1666666667 98% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1478.0 1977.66487455 75% => OK
No of words: 324.0 407.700716846 79% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.56172839506 4.8611393121 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.24264068712 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.67526904663 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 156.0 212.727598566 73% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.481481481481 0.524837075471 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 462.6 618.680645161 75% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 9.59856630824 156% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.94265232975 20% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 43.9584747233 48.9658058833 90% => OK
Chars per sentence: 73.9 100.406767564 74% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.2 20.6045352989 79% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.45 5.45110844103 82% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.233120992334 0.236089414692 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0736611656716 0.076458572812 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0950982927324 0.0737576698707 129% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.18805791621 0.150856017488 125% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0873426260349 0.0645574589148 135% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.1 11.7677419355 69% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 72.16 58.1214874552 124% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.2 10.1575268817 71% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.87 10.9000537634 81% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.92 8.01818996416 86% => OK
difficult_words: 51.0 86.8835125448 59% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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